Chapter 1

I was walking in a castle until a was attacked by a boy with a blade. Wait this doesn

Chapter 12

I went back to the camp and saw Kato awake.'' Hey Kato how are the wounds?''i asked as i sat down on the grass. Katp had different eyes this time. He had yellow eyes.'' Well guess the both of you are awake now. I will now tell you why i have you two here.''said the man. I had a feeling that something bad is about to happen. We walked in the forest until we stopped at a ruin castle. I looked at the castle. My head started to hurt right when i looked at it.'' This is our home. Take us out.'' The voices wouldn't stop and i fell on the ground holding my head. I then passed out from the voices in my head. The man lead to me and picked me up.'' Kato its time we get him to the dragon castle.''said the man.'' Yes master Kasti.''said Kato.

 

Chapter 11 was AWESOME! I don't care about the grammar or the spelling, cause we are all human. But really the story get more excited.

 

I am human, and I use proper spelling and grammar. >.> Just pointing out, he's older than me. >.< It's being lazy that results in poor spelling and grammar--how anyone gets higher than an "F" typing like that for English papers, I will never understand.

 

Aww man that was harsh ya? I see were your coming from though.

 

Good story and a great idea I think personally, but as far as certain spelling and grammar...it needs a little more improvement. I have been reading his stories and they are improving more each time, so the story is getting more interesting.

 

butterflylexi is right dude! But I see your doing this for fun like me and others, so don't take are comments to offensively lol. Just keep up the good story telling and surprises .