Text A tetsuya story not made by him

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

This is a story I made months ago about sora meeting naruto, If any interest, leave the first comment and I will tell it

[terraxaqua34 98]

i want to hear about tell me how sora met naruto

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

During the night when the Island got sucked,

Kairi:Sora get out of there and into the hut!

Sora: Grr! Whoa! This thing is sucking me iiiinnnnnnnn

( Sreams and gets sucked in. meanwhile in a different place)

Naruto: Wow a meteor storm!

Sakura: I know it's wonderful!

Sasuke: LOOK OUT!

( One hits the center of the leaf village)

Naruto: That was....awesome lets keep looking!

Sasuke: No! Let's check it out

Naruto: Right right let's go.

( At the center of the leaf village)

Sakura: What is that!?!?!

???: UGH

Naruto: AHH! it's an alien!

Sasuke: Shut up block head you know there is no such thing as alieans.

Naruto: That's what they want you to think

Sakura: Oh, It's a boy!

 

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[ReAcTioN BbS 0]

more dude

[terraxaqua34 98]

more come on

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

Okay

Sakura:Who are you?

???:Huh

Sasuke:Maybe he speaks dumb like Naruto (HEY!!)

Sora: I'm Sora

Naruto: Maybe Grandma can speak to him.

Sakura: Or I can heal him...... Holy jutsu!

sasuke: what?

Sakura: This boy has no chakra whatsoever

Sora: What Is chakra?

Naruto: We'll tell ya later.

Sakura: Maybe we should take him to her.

( In Tsunade's office)

Tsunade: Who's this?

Naruto: He fell from the sky in the meter storm.

Tsunade; let me talk to him in private.

 

By the way these stories take about 6 minutes to do

[terraxaqua34 98]

write more this is good

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

Tsunade: So..who are you?

Sora: I'm sora..and you

Tsunade: I am hokage

Sora: what is that a keyblade?

Tsunade: (Looks like we have another Naruto)

Sora: Well, anyway, I am not from here.

Tsunade: well that does changes things

(door bursts open)

Tsunade: What is it now

Jiraya: Lady Tsunade I need you to see........who's he

Tsunade: Never mind now what is it

Jiraiya; There are these white and black creatures coming through the gates

Sora: Nobodies and heartless!

Tsunade: what you know them

Sora :yeah they are after people's hearts

Tsunade:**gasps**

Jiraya:Even the women! oh no!

Sora: pervert!

Tsunade: you don't even know half of it

 

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[Marth 338]

write more write more *continues the chant*

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

Sora: anyway, I know how to get rid of them **summons keyblade**

Tsunade: what kind of weapon is that!?!?

Sora:Oh, it's the keyblade!

Tsunade: Interesting! can talk more later now get rid of those things!!

( jumps through window)

Tsunade: Haven't you heard of a window?

 

(Behind the gate.. or outside of it in other words)

Naruto:Shadow clone jutsu!

(begins attacking.....but..)

Clones: eewwww you must be crazy!

(kills themselves)

Naruto: awww

Sora: hhaaaaaa!!!!

(trinity like on kh1)

Naruto: sweet you gotta teach me that, that was better than my rasengan

Sora: no time....what is a rasengan?

Naruto: just go!........ eewwwww

 

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[terraxaqua34 98]

cool more please

[ripcurl92 0]

this is good. keep writing, man.

[KeyOfVentus 90]

I personally think it's good more please.

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

Naruto: by the way what is that sword

Sora: It's a keyblade for the second time

Naruto: ewwww

Sora: what is so disgusting about heartless and nobodies

Naruto: oh, it's not them...jiraya is humping a nobody

(The one off of kh2 that dances)

Sora: PERVERT!

(after three mins of fighting)

Sora: whew..I'm tired

Naruto: well you can't stop now

Sora: ugh use this

Naruto: the keyblade....this is..

Sora:don't say SPARTA

Naruto: What I was gonna say better than god of war

( maybe not....just a joke)

Naruto: alright here I come

Sora: ooh...ahh..whoa......cool.....ewww

Jiraya: shut up

Sora: hey give it back now ...i can fight

Naruto: No way this is cooler than you

Sora: Oh yeah, **summons keyblade back to hand**

Naruto:Huh...ow

(Naruto got hit in the back of the head)

Sora: that's what you get...and what is a rasengan

Naruto: look at this

(Charges it up)

Sora: cool attach in to my keyblade

(imagine a keyblade with the rasengan at the end)

Naruto & Sora: Ahhhh!

(kills a huge berserker nobody)

Sora: whew that was awesome

 

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[Think Pink 1,967]

I like the creativity in it.

But, as said before me, it's not very well put together.

I wouldn't actually call this a story--this is just dialogue to a story.

A story has not only what the characters are saying, but what they're thinking and feeling. Don't take my crit the wrong way, it's just so you can improve (:

[KeyOfVentus 90]

More please continue.

[Think Pink 1,967]

I think you've got the creativity going on.

[Protoman 1,974]

The story is really easy to think of.

The people in this story are OOC

and it really makes little sence.

Crossovers aren't all that great in the end.

 

ITs just a script. If It was a play, it would probably be much better. Not all ideas are good on paper.

 

Its immature to say the least. ._.

 

THERE IS SO MUCH MORE YOU CAN DO WITH THIS.

 

If I were to write a real review, you guys wouldn't read it anyways so...

[KeyOfVentus 90]

I personally like it, it takes guts to do this kind of stuff publicly or online I couldn't even if you don't really know who I am.

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

Naruto: I think that is all

Sakura: we are here

Naruto:Why do you come once we are already finished?

Sora: whatever let's get outta here!

(Back at the hokage's office)

Tsunade: hmm.. you do good at getting rid of those nasty things

Sora: thanks

Tsunade: So I'll give you a place to stay but come back tomorrow at noon

Sora: okay

(sleeps zzzzzz.....next day at 11:59)

Sora: Wow i'm lost

Kakashi: Really

Sora: yeah and who are you

kakashi: I'm kakashi sensei

Sora: Oh so no wonder I kept getting the bathrooms wrong .. this is a japanese place

Kakashi: whatever, so, where do you need to go?

Sora: to the hokage's office

Kakashi: okay I'll walk you there.

Sora: okay...uh sir, I mean sensei you dropped this

Kakashi: MAKE OUT TACTICS GIVE IT HERE

Sora: Okay???? (that was wierd)

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sorry if it bad I just wanted to get it done...like what kind of creativity.. although I am not a complete fan of either

[KeyOfVentus 90]

its okay I'll admit it's more of a script but it's still good-ish

[Think Pink 1,967]

I repeat: the creativity's going on. I like the part where Sora's getting mixed up with the japanese stuff

But just little parts saying what you're characters thinking and feeling would make a world of the difference ;3

[Xray0698@yahoo 5]

Tsunade: so you are here.

Sora: yeah what is going on with you crazy lady

Tsunade: If you ever say that again so help me I will rip you testacles off and feed it to the wild. How's that for carzy?

Sora:I am gonna die.

Tsunade:Let's get to the reason I brought you here. Since you are new and you can handle yourself why don't you become a ninja here?

Sora: Ah sweet a ninja is awesome!

Tsunade: But you will have to go through the chunin exams

Sora: (aw great I should have expected this)

Tsunade: and you can't use your keyblade

Sora: WHAT!!! you really are crazy!

Tsunade: GRRRRR!!!!!!

Sora: UH-OH.....

(After you know what happened)

Sora: ahhhhhh, aahhhhh now I will never have kids with kairi.

Tsunade: Kairi? you know her to

Sora: yeah....ahhhhh!

Tsunade: she was here somtime ago.

 

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[ReAcTioN BbS 0]

try writing it like a story instead of a script. like put it in a first person POV instead of the third person POV

[terraxaqua34 98]

more please it's getting funny