Col.Random 3,683 Posted May 6, 2016 (edited) So I've had this idea for a while. This is supposed to be an alternate timeline where the series is darker than the original one.Note that this is just a random chapter and not the actual start of the story.Originally I wasn't going to write this story, but i was in a writing mood today and was thinking about Kingdom Hearts so I decided to write about this part.I'm afraid I might not actually write the whole story and might instead just add major plot chapters instead. Part of this is because I honestly don't know how I would write the parts that are related to Disney worlds since there isn't much I can change without ruining the essence of the Disney worlds.Anyways I need to sleep Do give this a read and tell me what you guys think and if you would like to see more of this story (possibly the whole thing) in the future. Might just give me motivation to write the whole thing. Chapter (??) DROWNING LIGHTNot long after, the trio walked out of the dark corridor to see a familiar yet daunting sight. The dark, rainy sky coupled with the murky, uninviting atmosphere brought back memories and certainly not happy ones. Not much had changed in The Realm Of Darkness, not much except - as Riku and Mickey immediately noticed - for the fact that the once majestic castle at the center of it all was just barely visible. Only the top of castle's ramparts and towers could be seen amidst the shadows of the several tall buildings in what always seemed to be the central hub of the Realm Of Darkness."We better hurry", said Riku. Kairi, who was focused on her surroundings, flinched. This part of the Realm Of Darkness certainly felt more terrifying than the castle."Don't forget, Kairi, we're going to hafta be really alert here. The Realm Of Darkness is a scary place", Mickey told her. Kairi nodded, and the trio began moving towards the darker, rockier area, further and further away from the tall buildings.Kairi kept looking around,her Keyblade at the ready, half expecting a group of Heartless to ambush them any second. She wondered if Master Yen Sid really knew what he was doing, sending her to this place."Riku, Mickey, you two shall take Kairi with you", Yen Sid ordered, shocking everyone in the room."But Master Yen Sid, won't that be too dangerous?", Mickey argued."Maybe you ought to send me instead?", Lea suggested.Master Yen Sid shook his head. "Xehanort is a cunning man, he may have even set traps for Kairi in many of the worlds, but even he may not have considered the idea of us sending Kairi to The Realm Of Darkness on her first mission. It is also safe to assume that many of the events after the Mark Of Mastery exam are no longer events Xehanort can fully predict. Our most recent incident in Twilight Town was something perhaps nobody could have predicted. I believe young Kairi has been trained well enough to hold her own against an enemy, she only needs experience now. Keeping all this in mind, I decided it was best to send her with Mickey and Riku", Yen Sid explained.Everyone looked at Kairi and at each other. It sounded like a big risk, but they could not argue with him."Don't worry everyone, I'll be fine. I'm going with Riku and the King after all", Kairi tried to assure everyone.When everyone had departed on their missions, Yen Sid laid back in his chair. "This young girl has a far more important task to perform on this mission than everyone thinks. I trust Kairi will be the one to save her when the time comes".The trio continued walking through the rocky terrain. Kairi pinched her arm. "Nope, not a nightmare", she thought, "we're actually here for real". Strange spiky pillars and glowing blue rocks surrounded them, the atmosphere around them had a purple and red mist. There was a certain beauty to this terrifying place. They had been walking and searching for a while and at this point something certainly made them all feel more worried. Where are all the Heartless and Nobodies? The Realm Of Darkness was swarming with them the last time they were here, but now there wasn't a single creature in sight. Kairi's thoughts drifted towards Sora. Where was he? What was he doing? Would everyone be able to return home safely at the end of this journey? Will they really put a stop to Xehanort? Will they- Kairi's focus shifted towards Mickey who looked really depressed."Is everything okay, Your Majesty?", she asked him, though she already knew what troubled him."I'm just...so worried", Mickey replied," Master Yen Sid said her light has become so faint, he can barely see it. Master Aqua has been down here for so long I just....I just hope we can get to her in time"."We will! We're getting close to the area where Master Yen Sid told us she might be. Just a short walk and we'll save her", Riku assured Mickey."I hope s- THERE! A NOBODY", Mickey exclaimed, pointing towards a large group of Dusk Nobodies who seemed to be rushing towards something. A group of them noticed the trio and began charging towards them."Get ready!", Riku yelled, taking down two of them with one swing of his Keyblade. Kairi looked towards Mickey who had already sliced through four of them. Kairi knew that at this rate, there wouldn't be any left for her so she charged towards the nearest one.Kairi swung her Keyblade, hoping to take it by surprise, but the Dusk executed a dodge that would be impossible for any other creatureand got around to her side. Kairi managed to block it's strike and the contact with her Keyblade caused the Dusk to become stunned. Taking advantage, Kairi attacked again, successfully beating her first enemy. She turned around with the widest possible smile on her face. "Guys! I DID IT! I actually beat my first Nobody!", she yelled to her partners, both of whom had finished off all the Nobodies that attacked them."KAIRI LOOK OUT!", Mickey yelled. Kairi turned around to see a Nobody attacking from above her in a strange spinning motion as her eyes widened and her body prepared itself for the impact.Out of the corner of her eye, she noticed a small glow on her Keyblade and then, almost as if her Keyblade had controlled her, she moved out of harm's way and appeared behind the Nobody which had now become tangled up in it's own limbs, looking around in confusion - Dusks were kind of stupid that way. Immediately realizing her Keyblade had moved her out of the way she seized the opportunity and struck down the Nobody. Two points for Kairi; zero for the Dusks."That was close", said Riku. Kairi smiled at him and Mickey, both of whom smiled back."Now come on! We hafta see where those other Nobodies were going!", Mickey said, running off towards a path hidden by some of the spiky pillars and glowing rocks.They arrived at the beach to find a large horde of Dusks walking towards the sea and they appeared to be fighting someone.The trio heard a loud, terrifying noise that sounded like a mix between a roar and a screech. One bright streak of purple light cut through the Dusks, annihilating them instantly. Right in front of the trio stood a strange, humanoid figure, it appeared to have an armour made of darkness that covered its entire body, but that was not what bothered the trio as much as the weapon the figure held."That Keyblade! It's- oh no", Mickey was in shock," M-Master Aqua...? It's me! Your old pal Mickey!". Mickey de-materialised his Keyblade and began to approach her."Aqua, it's me". Master Aqua clutched her head and growled, raising Eraqus' Keyblade."KING MICKEY LOOK OUT", Riku yelled as he dived towards Mickey, pushing the disillusioned king out of the way as an orb made of light and dark exploded where Mickey was standing."Your Majesty, we have to fight her! She's too dangerous right now, if we weaken her we might have a better chance at saving her", Riku told Mickey."Alright", Mickey summoned his Keyblade. "Forgive me, Master Aqua", he mumbled to himself as he got ready to fight."I'm sorry your first mission turned out to be so dangerous. Just stay back and let us take care of this, alright?", Riku said to Kairi.The duo rushed in and the fight began. Master Aqua, The Faded Welp so here it is. I can't guarantee I'll eventually get around to writing this whole story since that would require me to watch a few Disney movies, which I won't have time for until June.Hope you enjoyed. 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teh lazy prince Xylek 1,559 Posted May 6, 2016 i skimmed it but didn't see my name pop up 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
riku1995 121 Posted May 7, 2016 Its a pretty good twist that's for sure I wouldn't mind reading more when you get the chance to write more but great job. 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Organization member XV 49 Posted May 7, 2016 I'm not usually one to read fanfics all that often, but this was a pretty good one in my opinion. Really hope you do more in the future! 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Col.Random 3,683 Posted May 7, 2016 i skimmed it but didn't see my name pop up i'm saving you for the finale Its a pretty good twist that's for sure I wouldn't mind reading more when you get the chance to write more but great job. I'm not usually one to read fanfics all that often, but this was a pretty good one in my opinion. Really hope you do more in the future! Thank you. I certainly will add some more chapters ^^ 3 riku1995, Organization member XV and teh lazy prince Xylek reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
AzureAce 544 Posted May 7, 2016 I think Square have one of the best opportunities they're ever going to get to make a Kingdom Hearts game have multiple endings. One ending will be that Sora or whoever defeats Xehanort and the Lights triumph over the Darknesses, supposedly rewriting the history the Book of Prophecies foretold. And another ending will be that Sora or whoever will be defeated by Xehanort and Light will perish to the Darkness, continuing the events of the Book of Prophecies. I think it would be a brilliant way for Square to add more replay value to the game, they could also differ the end-game content ever so slightly with this alternate ending scheme. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
riku1995 121 Posted May 7, 2016 (edited) i'm saving you for the finale ;)Thank you. I certainly will add some more chapters ^^I look forward to reading them and if you don't mind can you check out my story that I did here's the link http://kh13.com/forum/topic/96585-kingdom-hearts-the-dragon-war/ when you get a chance can you please check it. Also when you read it can you tell me what you think of it would really mean a lot to me Edited May 7, 2016 by riku1995 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
The Transcendent Key 12,109 Posted May 8, 2016 Hmm, this is very intriguing! Color me impressed! I would like to see more of this story, if you decide to continue it! You seem to have great writing skills, and reading through this made me picture how this would happen in Kingdom Hearts III! Splendid job! If you ever decide to write this whole story, then I shall definitely look forward to it! 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Col.Random 3,683 Posted May 8, 2016 I think Square have one of the best opportunities they're ever going to get to make a Kingdom Hearts game have multiple endings. One ending will be that Sora or whoever defeats Xehanort and the Lights triumph over the Darknesses, supposedly rewriting the history the Book of Prophecies foretold. And another ending will be that Sora or whoever will be defeated by Xehanort and Light will perish to the Darkness, continuing the events of the Book of Prophecies. I think it would be a brilliant way for Square to add more replay value to the game, they could also differ the end-game content ever so slightly with this alternate ending scheme. that would definitely be an interesting thing to see Hmm, this is very intriguing! Color me impressed! I would like to see more of this story, if you decide to continue it! You seem to have great writing skills, and reading through this made me picture how this would happen in Kingdom Hearts III! Splendid job! If you ever decide to write this whole story, then I shall definitely look forward to it! thank you ^^ I look forward to reading them and if you don't mind can you check out my story that I did here's the link http://kh13.com/forum/topic/96585-kingdom-hearts-the-dragon-war/ when you get a chance can you please check it. Also when you read it can you tell me what you think of it would really mean a lot to me i'll give it a look as soon as i get time (got exams right now ) 2 The Transcendent Key and riku1995 reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
The Transcendent Key 12,109 Posted May 9, 2016 thank you ^^ You're welcome! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
riku1995 121 Posted May 9, 2016 that would definitely be an interesting thing to see thank you ^^ i'll give it a look as soon as i get time (got exams right now )When ever you get a chance I not rushing you but when you get a chance please let me know what you think Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
King Tag1999 (kingtag1999) 45 Posted May 10, 2016 Sounds really good! You should write more! :-) 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Col.Random 3,683 Posted May 23, 2016 (edited) Chapter (??) Lingering Light Hoping to make use of their numbers and keep the attention away from Kairi, Riku and Mickey flanked Aqua. Aqua leapt high into the air and fired a barrage of dark crystals at both of them. Riku swiftly dodged each projectile, attempting to gain some distance form her in the process of doing so while Mickey chose to block each dark crystal.Almost as if she was flying, Aqua darted straight towards Mickey from mid-air. She swung her blade at Mickey who blocked it. The impact of Aqua's attack made Mickey feel as if he had just stopped a truck with his bare hands. Aqua swung her blade several more times while Mickey blocked each successive hit."She's become so much more powerful than before", Mickey couldn't help but notice."Your Majesty, get out of the way!", Riku yelled, charging towards them with his keyblade pointed towards Aqua. Mickey blocked another strike from Aqua and got away from her just in time to avoid Riku's Blizzaga spell which covered Aqua's entire lower body and her Keyblade-arm in ice.Aqua grunted as she struggled to move, she tried to claw off the ice with her other arm, but the ice was quite thick and strong. Mickey, Riku and Kairi calmed down a bit. "Aqua, I know you're in there!", Mickey said, trying to get through to Aqua once more. " I'm sorry you had 'ta fight against the darkness alone for so long...but we're here now. We're here to take you home. Please, I need you to fight the darkness one last time".Kairi watched, impatiently from a distance. She felt as if this battle had gone on for hours. "Mickey, please get through to her", she wished.Aqua stopped struggling against the ice and for a moment stared at Mickey through the darkness that covered her"...Mi...Mi..Mickey...", she mumbled."Aqua?", Mickey said. Was he able to get through to her?Aqua began growling once more as she clutched her head. Mickey stepped back as Aqua let out a loud roar and a huge explosion of darkness caused the ice on her to get blown to smithereens.The darkness that made up her armour looked more like a fire that was going out of control. She lunged at Mickey and the battle began once more.Aqua brought an overhead strike with her Keyblade which Mickey dodged, choosing to remain on the defensive.Aqua abruptly stopped and began growling and clutching her head. Aqua then roared loudly, jabbing her Keyblade into the ground and causing several pillars of light and dark to shoot out of the ground surrounding her, sending both Riku and the King flying back."RIKU! KING MICKEY", Kairi yelled."No, stay back!", Riku warned Kairi who had begun to rush to their aid."But-""Kairi jus-", Riku was cut off by another attempted attack from Aqua, but he managed to roll out of the way and got back to his feet just in time to block another hit from Aqua.Once again Aqua stopped abruptly, clutching her head and then resumed attacking the duo. The fight went on like this with Aqua frequently stopping to clutch her head one moment and attacking more aggressively in the next. All the while Kairi stood by, watching impatiently. She knew she was not ready to fight such a dangerous foe and yet she could not help but want to charge in with her Keyblade and fight, for her friends were in danger and she could no longer bear to stand in the sidelines."It's always been this way, hasn't it?", Kairi began to think," everyone's always fought for and protected me while I stood and watched from a safe place. I've never even had the chance to repay them... Riku, Sora and the others. I can't stand on the sidelines forever, I'm a Keyblade wielder now!".Kairi gritted her teeth as she filled her heart with resolve. "I WILL fight!".Aqua was engaged with Riku and the King- both of whom were beginning to tire out at this point- when Kairi cast a Firaga spell from behind that took Aqua by surprise, sending her flying several feet away."Kairi, we told ya to stay back. It's dangerous!", Mickey scolded Kairi."I'm sorry, Your Majesty, but I...I just can't stand by while my friends fight...anymore", Kairi explained, giving Mickey and Riku a weak, but assuring smile. The smile broke off almost instantly, however, as Kairi's attention was caught by a peculiar object lying on the ground. As Aqua rose to her feet and Mickey and Riku got ready to defend themselves, Kairi-almost as if she was in trance- picked up the object. It was a cracked, blue object that looked a lot like the lucky charm she made out of sea-shells.Suddenly the blue Wayfinder and Kairi's chest began to glow and Kairi remembered a small moment from her childhood where she had been rescued by a mysterious blue woman wielding a Keyblade."I just cast a magic spell on you. One day, when you're in trouble, the light within you will lead you to the light of another", Aqua's words resonated in Kairi's mind.Kairi looked at Aqua, who stood a few feet away-clutching her head again."That was...you", Kairi mumbled. Aqua began to run towards Kairi to attack and, much to Riku's and Mickey's shock, Kairi ran at full speed towards Aqua. Kairi's chest and the wayfinder started to glow brighter and brighter as she approached Aqua. Aqua swung her blade with full strength, which Kairi blocked, not with her Keyblade, but with the glowing blue wayfinder causing a bright flash of light that illuminated the dark surrounding areas and almost blinded Mickey and Riku.A few seconds later Riku and Mickey opened their eyes. Eraqus' Keyblade was lying on the ground and not far from it was the face of a friend Mickey had not seen in a long time. Aqua sat on her knees, Kairi's arms wrapped around her to provide comfort, the darkness that once covered her was fading away."This light! I remember it. It's you. It really IS you!", Aqua said as tears of joy and relief streamed out of her bright, blue eyes.Mickey ran in and joined the hug."It's been too long, old pal", he exclaimed.Riku stood there, smiling; it had certainly been a while since he had cracked a single smile._________________________________________________________________________________________So well that's the second part of this part of the story. I kept wanting to add music to this scene since music has the ability to add a lot of depth to scene, but it's hard to execute it with writing so I decided not to add it.Hope you guys enjoyed ^^ Edited May 23, 2016 by Col.Random 1 riku1995 reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
riku1995 121 Posted May 27, 2016 Chapter (??) Lingering Light Hoping to make use of their numbers and keep the attention away from Kairi, Riku and Mickey flanked Aqua. Aqua leapt high into the air and fired a barrage of dark crystals at both of them. Riku swiftly dodged each projectile, attempting to gain some distance form her in the process of doing so while Mickey chose to block each dark crystal. Almost as if she was flying, Aqua darted straight towards Mickey from mid-air. She swung her blade at Mickey who blocked it. The impact of Aqua's attack made Mickey feel as if he had just stopped a truck with his bare hands. Aqua swung her blade several more times while Mickey blocked each successive hit. "She's become so much more powerful than before", Mickey couldn't help but notice. "Your Majesty, get out of the way!", Riku yelled, charging towards them with his keyblade pointed towards Aqua. Mickey blocked another strike from Aqua and got away from her just in time to avoid Riku's Blizzaga spell which covered Aqua's entire lower body and her Keyblade-arm in ice. Aqua grunted as she struggled to move, she tried to claw off the ice with her other arm, but the ice was quite thick and strong. Mickey, Riku and Kairi calmed down a bit. "Aqua, I know you're in there!", Mickey said, trying to get through to Aqua once more. " I'm sorry you had 'ta fight against the darkness alone for so long...but we're here now. We're here to take you home. Please, I need you to fight the darkness one last time". Kairi watched, impatiently from a distance. She felt as if this battle had gone on for hours. "Mickey, please get through to her", she wished. Aqua stopped struggling against the ice and for a moment stared at Mickey through the darkness that covered her"...Mi...Mi..Mickey...", she mumbled. "Aqua?", Mickey said. Was he able to get through to her? Aqua began growling once more as she clutched her head. Mickey stepped back as Aqua let out a loud roar and a huge explosion of darkness caused the ice on her to get blown to smithereens.The darkness that made up her armour looked more like a fire that was going out of control. She lunged at Mickey and the battle began once more. Aqua brought an overhead strike with her Keyblade which Mickey dodged, choosing to remain on the defensive. Aqua abruptly stopped and began growling and clutching her head. Aqua then roared loudly, jabbing her Keyblade into the ground and causing several pillars of light and dark to shoot out of the ground surrounding her, sending both Riku and the King flying back. "RIKU! KING MICKEY", Kairi yelled. "No, stay back!", Riku warned Kairi who had begun to rush to their aid. "But-" "Kairi jus-", Riku was cut off by another attempted attack from Aqua, but he managed to roll out of the way and got back to his feet just in time to block another hit from Aqua. Once again Aqua stopped abruptly, clutching her head and then resumed attacking the duo. The fight went on like this with Aqua frequently stopping to clutch her head one moment and attacking more aggressively in the next. All the while Kairi stood by, watching impatiently. She knew she was not ready to fight such a dangerous foe and yet she could not help but want to charge in with her Keyblade and fight, for her friends were in danger and she could no longer bear to stand in the sidelines. "It's always been this way, hasn't it?", Kairi began to think," everyone's always fought for and protected me while I stood and watched from a safe place. I've never even had the chance to repay them... Riku, Sora and the others. I can't stand on the sidelines forever, I'm a Keyblade wielder now!". Kairi gritted her teeth as she filled her heart with resolve. "I WILL fight!". Aqua was engaged with Riku and the King- both of whom were beginning to tire out at this point- when Kairi cast a Firaga spell from behind that took Aqua by surprise, sending her flying several feet away. "Kairi, we told ya to stay back. It's dangerous!", Mickey scolded Kairi. "I'm sorry, Your Majesty, but I...I just can't stand by while my friends fight...anymore", Kairi explained, giving Mickey and Riku a weak, but assuring smile. The smile broke off almost instantly, however, as Kairi's attention was caught by a peculiar object lying on the ground. As Aqua rose to her feet and Mickey and Riku got ready to defend themselves, Kairi-almost as if she was in trance- picked up the object. It was a cracked, blue object that looked a lot like the lucky charm she made out of sea-shells. Suddenly the blue Wayfinder and Kairi's chest began to glow and Kairi remembered a small moment from her childhood where she had been rescued by a mysterious blue woman wielding a Keyblade. "I just cast a magic spell on you. One day, when you're in trouble, the light within you will lead you to the light of another", Aqua's words resonated in Kairi's mind. Kairi looked at Aqua, who stood a few feet away-clutching her head again. "That was...you", Kairi mumbled. Aqua began to run towards Kairi to attack and, much to Riku's and Mickey's shock, Kairi ran at full speed towards Aqua. Kairi's chest and the wayfinder started to glow brighter and brighter as she approached Aqua. Aqua swung her blade with full strength, which Kairi blocked, not with her Keyblade, but with the glowing blue wayfinder causing a bright flash of light that illuminated the dark surrounding areas and almost blinded Mickey and Riku. A few seconds later Riku and Mickey opened their eyes. Eraqus' Keyblade was lying on the ground and not far from it was the face of a friend Mickey had not seen in a long time. Aqua sat on her knees, Kairi's arms wrapped around her to provide comfort, the darkness that once covered her was fading away. "This light! I remember it. It's you. It really IS you!", Aqua said as tears of joy and relief streamed out of her bright, blue eyes. Mickey ran in and joined the hug."It's been too long, old pal", he exclaimed. Riku stood there, smiling; it had certainly been a while since he had cracked a single smile. _________________________________________________________________________________________ So well that's the second part of this part of the story. I kept wanting to add music to this scene since music has the ability to add a lot of depth to scene, but it's hard to execute it with writing so I decided not to add it. Hope you guys enjoyed ^^ Again I say nice twist to it I like the way you made Kairi remember Aqua by the Wayfinder and her necklace glowing. Almost the like how Sora remembered Aqua in DDD. 1 Col.Random reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites