KeybladeWielderXIII 11 Posted May 4, 2014 (edited) Hello everybody, I wrote a screenplay for a Kingdom Hearts Fan Film we are shooting this summer, and I was wondering if I could get some feedback. It is based in the Kingdom Hearts universe, but is a new story with new characters. It's the story of two nobodies in their search for meaning in a twilight-town-type world. Thanks guys! Untitled Kingdom Hearts Fan Film_v1_14_05_03.pdf Edited May 4, 2014 by KeybladeWielderXIII Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
MasterXemnas 2,285 Posted May 4, 2014 Fool. Not very good. Some of the format is off for a screenplay. Your targeted audience will be very very very small. I'd say you should almost never turn a bad fan fic into a film. Either do something something original or stick with the original KH story. Otherwise it will be a waste of time and money. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KeybladeWielderXIII 11 Posted May 4, 2014 Fool. Not very good. Some of the format is off for a screenplay. Your targeted audience will be very very very small. I'd say you should almost never turn a bad fan fic into a film. Either do something something original or stick with the original KH story. Otherwise it will be a waste of time and money. Was there anything in particular that was made it bad fan fic? Like certain pieces of dialogue or story pieces? I feel like the Kingdom Hearts is a series that can spawn many amazing images and stories for a film, but the original canon is way too hard to make into live action. It is basically a anime cartoon intertwined into disney worlds. There are tons of fan films that aren't don't have the original characters or stories. Thanks for being honest, but I feel like a fan film like this could be something that KH fans would enjoy. If this exists, then I feel it would be lame to abandoned it just because of my subpar first draft writing skills. Is there anyway you can see this project being interesting or do you think I should abandon it? Thanks man Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Deadpool 1,200 Posted May 4, 2014 Fool. Not very good. Some of the format is off for a screenplay. Your targeted audience will be very very very small. I'd say you should almost never turn a bad fan fic into a film. Either do something something original or stick with the original KH story. Otherwise it will be a waste of time and money. But isn't KH itself already a fanfic? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Nweintraub 630 Posted May 4, 2014 I'm not really interested in it, it's boring. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
MasterXemnas 2,285 Posted May 4, 2014 Fool. If you can somehow connect it to the main story, it might work. It has to seem interesting to someone who has never heard of Kingdom Hearts. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KeybladeWielderXIII 11 Posted October 22, 2015 Here's what the film ended up being after I hired a writer. Thanks for the feedback! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KairiKeybasH 851 Posted October 25, 2015 Wait you're behind the story of Nobody? 1 KeybladeWielderXIII reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
MasterXemnas 2,285 Posted March 17, 2016 Here's what the film ended up being after I hired a writer. Thanks for the feedback! Fool. Nice work. You definitely did the best with what you had. Visual effects were great, I'd say. Very nice audio, was the dialogue adr? Some of the lines were clunky and/or didn't make sense. Choreography for the fight needs work, but choreographers and fancy stunt work can get expensive, so I get it. Try maybe cutting up the action in to more shots. Best fan film ever, no not really. Great Kingdom Hearts film, yeah, it's up there. Sorry it took so long for a reply, I've been off this site for a long time. 1 KeybladeWielderXIII reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
