Text Omnia - The first journey

[Giginha 22]

So this is like my life

[Naminé15 0]

Wait!!! That's .... THAT'S OUR BEST STORY(THE ONLY ONE I REALLY HELPED TO CREATE).Cool! you're finaly writing it, sis!:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

That's a story with lots of sequels( that's why the name of it the first ) .

[Sarrin 100]

cant wait to see the development

[Giginha 22]

Yeah, sorry to keep anyone who had read this waiting. So to make explanation shorter, I've re-written (does this word exist?) the intro and the first story, so here's the new intro and the 1st chapter is on its way.

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Introduction - The Circle of Fate

The sun shined on the blue sky throwing its rays of light over the small village by the sea. I lied on the roof of that house listening to the sound of the waves on the beach hitting gently the white sand that spread all across the area. The cool wind hit my body like gentle and soft feathers; I stared at the sky while my thoughts wondered through the never ending horizon.

That short holiday couldn

[Antrium 10]

This is great! You could redo a few sentences and such but mostly the plot seems very well put together and although a little weird at points, such as the half human half cat hybrids, this story seems to have a feel all of it's own.

 

Was this constructive enough? lol

[Giginha 22]

Sure it was, I'm still going to remake this intro after I'm done with the 1st chapter, and there are some characteristics that have been changed as well, if you read the 1st intro I did and them read the story that is coming everything will be different. Well, we can't expect a story that I've been writing for six years to be the same all the time can we?