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Okay guys, here’s the next chapter!  By the way, when you finish reading, I want you all to answer me a question.  Do you like the way I’m writing this story?  Originally I was going to do it from a third person perspective, but then I realized that it was better if I wrote it from a first person perspective.  And so, I want to ask you all, do you like the way the story is written?  Please be sure to answer and comment on the chapter when you finish reading! :D
 
Chapter Five: Investigation
 
About twenty minutes later, we make it to my house.  It’s not exactly in the city, so to speak.  It’s in a more natural place, with a forest serving as my backyard.  I park the guard in my nearby shed, and I urge Derek and Rose to get out of the car.  I unlock the door to my house, and then we all step in.  I turn towards them and say: “Make yourselves at home, but please don’t touch anything fragile, or anything that has to do with my research.  I like to be very organized, so I don’t want any messes here, understood?”  They nod and they both sit down in the living room.  I head towards the kitchen and get myself some water, and then I observe Rose and Derek from the counter.  Rose silently lowers her head down, as if in a deep train of thought, while Derek looks around the house curiously.  I sip my cup of water and continue to observe them.  I then sigh and finish up my cup of water and offer them some refreshments.  Rose says in an almost silent whisper: “No thank you…” while Derek nods that he doesn’t want any water.  After a few minutes, I call out to them and tell them to come with me into the hall.
 
Derek looks at me and then asks: “Um, what are we doing here?”  I glare at him and say: “This is where my office is, but I’m going to have to ask you to turn away.”  He nods and he turns away while I enter the password into the small keyboard hidden behind a portrait of me as a little boy.  When the keyboard beeps, the hall gives way to a set of stairs that lead downward.  I then tell Derek that he can turn around, and then he gasps in amazement.  He says: “Wow, this is pretty neat!  You’re like the Batman of real life!”  I look at him then turn around and roll my eyes: “Um, sure.  Thanks.  Anyways, come down with me.”  Derek goes down the stairs, but I see Rose just standing there on the hallway, her heard turned away from me.  I approach her and say: “Look, I know that you don’t feel comfortable, but I just want to tell you that you can trust me.  If there’s anything at all you need, or if there’s something you’d rather tell me in private, then just let me know.”  She turns around, again with her eyes gazing upon mine, even though she’s blind.  She runs her fingers through her hair and she says:  “Vincent…I appreciate what you’re doing…but just don’t…”  I look at her and reply:  “Don’t what?  She folds her arms and says:  “I know that you’re trying to get into my mind.  I know that you’re trying to help me, but just don’t.  I’m a lost cause…”  I lean in closer to her, and this time, she doesn’t seem to be uncomfortable, and I just say:  “No one is ever a lost cause.  Don’t sell yourself short.”  She nods and then she says: “Vincent.  Let’s just focus on the matter at hand…”  I take a moment and then say: “Rose…I-“ but I’m cut short by Derek, who’s calling us from the basement.  He shouts: “Hey, are you guys coming down or what?  I step away from Rose, a little dazed by her beauty, and then I go down the stairs, and I hear Rose coming down behind me.
 
The minute I enter my office, I see Derek touching one of my books and I shout: “Hey, don’t touch that!!!”  Derek jumps back, startled, and he falls on his butt.  He then says: “Sorry!   I didn’t mean to touch anything!”  I hear Rose giggle softly, and I smile for a moment, thinking of her…but then I shake off the thought and then I clear my throat.  I go straight to my desk and sit down, and tell them to take their seats.  I nod at them and say: “All right, let’s get down to business.  Do any of you two know of any other incident that has involved this type of murderer?”  Derek nods no, and Rose just stays silent, making me think that she’s hiding something valuable.  I observe them both and then I lean back on my chair and clean my glasses:  “Hmm, it seems that we won’t get that much far if we don’t have any sort of lead.  The only thing we do know is that the killer is signaling someone.  But either it be a simple taunt or just a gesture of madness is yet to be seen.  And of all the people the murderer could target, why did the person choose a small child as its victim?  I mean seriously, wouldn’t the murderer have killed a corrupt politician, or even any person that relates to the branch of law and order?  It boggles the mind…”  I lower my head and close my eyes and enter in deep thought.
 
(Start Song Here)
I hear Derek shift in his chair and then he says: “Well, whatever the case, we’ll be sure to help you, and justice is in our side!”  I chuckle grimly and then fix my gaze upon him and say:  “That is an out of place word Derek.  Justice does not truly exist.  The world you think you know to be safe and peaceful is really just a wide network of deceit and lies and cover ups.  The government makes laws to get more money, and money gives them power, and power makes them corrupt.  No true justice exists here in this Earth.  Every day you see judges get bribed, and most of the time the people that go to jail are the innocent and hardworking people, while the criminals roam the streets, preying on the weak.  And yet the people are too blind to see this, and they choose to go with the flow of things.  But let me tell you something Derek, the only true justice that exists is that of God.  He is Alpha and Omega, and his judgment is the only one that truly works.”  Derek then stays silent, and then I fix my gaze towards Rose.  She seems amazed by my words, and then she asks me:  “Did you ever consider to be a politician?”  I laugh and say:  “No, that doesn’t work for me.  I prefer being in this line of work, which lets me do what I think is just.  And so far, I’ve made small differences in the world, even though their small.  But the smallest thing can make the biggest difference, right?“ She nods and says: “Right.” and I see a smile form on her face.
 
After a few seconds, I say:  “All right, let me do a bit of investigating.”  They nod and sit back in their chairs, apparently waiting for what I’m about to say next.  I search in my computer for murders related to the one in this case, and, surprisingly, a result pops up.  I then lean towards my desks and look at them:  “All right, according to my computer, there are a few murders that have occurred in this same manner, and they all seem to have a link.  Most of the murders are exactly the same as the one presented in Tyler’s case, but there’s one in which the victim was left alive.  But what’s interesting here though, is the fact that none of these murders have been solved, and the murderer has never been captured.  Hmph, it’s irritating how no one’s seemed to solve this.  Why didn’t anyone contact me when these murders happened?”  Rose says nothing, and I just see her remain silent, which again makes my suspicions about her being tied to the murderer even more correct.  Derek then says:  “So, what should our first step be?”  I ponder his question, and I twirl my fingers on the various paper clips on my desk.  I then look up to the ceiling and say:  “Well, for starters, it’s wise to go to the place where this crime occurred.  There’s sure to be some kind of evidence there that can help us piece this up.  But I’m going to the crime scene alone.” Derek stands up and pounds his fist on the desk: “Why can’t we go with you!?”  I glare at him and say:  “Do not argue with me Derek.  I know what I’m doing.  If I require of your assistance again, I’ll contact you.”  Rose then stands up and says:  “Vincent’s right Derek, we should let him get into this first and then contact us.”  Derek stays silent and he just turns away.  I then get some papers and write down my phone number and give it to Derek, and then I turn toward rose and ask:  “Do you have any sort of machine that can record data so that you can have my number?”  She nods and says:  “Yeah, my phone has a voice recorder/voice command calling method so I can call anyone by just saying their name.”  I nod and then she gives it to me and I say my phone number and the phone records it. I then ask her:  “Where was the crime committed?”  She responds: “On Route 59.”  I nod and then we get out of the house and then I drive them back to the city.  I nod and say:  “Thank you for your help, I’ll be sure to contact you again real soon.”  And so I drive towards Route 59.  I will solve this case, of that I’m sure.
 
(End Song Here)
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Let me know what you all thought of the chapter!  And let me know if the story is developing good so far!  And let me know your opinions of the characters! :D

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Great chapters lately. This has been getting great. And to answer your question third and first perspective are just different styles so it just comes down to taste. I personally prefer first person perspectives but either way I'm finding this story to be great so far. :)

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Great chapters lately. This has been getting great. And to answer your question third and first perspective are just different styles so it just comes down to taste. I personally prefer first person perspectives but either way I'm finding this story to be great so far. :)

Thanks, I'm happy to know that you like how the story is coming along!  And yes, I think that first person is the best perspective in this story.  I hope you continue to keep on reading.  I'll do my best to deliver interesting and intriguing chapters. ^_^

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Thank you all once again for your awesome comments!  I get a big smile on my face every time I see your comments!  Now then, here is the next chapter, enjoy!  And remember that this chapter is from Rose’s point of view. :P
 
Chapter Nine: Desire
 
The next day, I head downtown in search of Vincent.  I ask a few people here and there and ask them if they have seen him.  They reply that the last place they saw him was at Starbucks.  I then said to myself: “Starbucks, huh?  Well, I guess I’ll just have to ask someone to take me there.”  I then walk through the crowds until I overhear what apparently seems to be news reporter talking about some new scientific discovery.  After she finishes talking, I head towards her and ask: “Excuse me, could you take me to Starbucks?  I’ve been able to find my way around here, but I’ve never been to Starbucks before, so can you guide me there?”  I hear the woman step towards me, and then she replies: “Oh I see, your blind.  Oh, you poor dear, of course I’ll take you to Starbucks!”  She then tells me to follow her, and I walk by her side until we reach Starbucks.  I then thank her and we part ways.  My heart starts to pound faster…I feel a sudden surge of excitement take over me.  I want to be with Vincent again.  Then I make my way towards the door and go in.  And, just on cue, I hear Vincent approach me.  He replies in a happy tone: “Good morning Rose.  I’m surprised that you’re here.  How are you?”  I then feel his hand hold mine, and I blush and say: “I’m good thanks.  I was actually looking for you.”
 
I then feel his hand on my shoulder, and as before, I don’t flinch by his touch.  He then says: “Well, you found me.  Come over here, I’ll buy you some coffee, how does that sound?”  I smile and put a strand of my hair behind my ear and say: “Sure, that would be great.”  We then sit down on the table and then he gets me my coffee, and then I slowly sip my cup.  I then ask him: “Any luck on the investigation?”  I then feel the seriousness in his tone of voice as he says: “Nothing yet.  But I’m curious.  Yesterday you talked to me about this Wade person.  It could be possible that he’s the one who murdered Tyler, but I checked the blood sample I extracted from a bloodstained piece of his shirt.  I analyzed it and the computer detected his blood, but not from him.  According to police reports, Wade died four years ago, apparently he committed suicide.”  I gasp when he says this and I almost spill my coffee cup.  I then calm down and think to myself: “He’s dead.  The bastard is dead.  Good riddance!”  I then ask:  “Are you sure that he’s dead?”  I then hear him sip his coffee cup and he says: “Yes.  And I checked all possible fake identities and documents, but this is official.  He’s dead.  Which means that the person who committed Tyler’s murder is Wade’s relative, but be it his cousin, brother, father, or anyone else is beyond my knowledge.  But at least we have a lead.  Now we just have to find out who it is.”  I then nod and say:  “If there’s anything I can do to help you, please let me know, and I’ll do my best.”
 
Then I feel his hand gently caress mine.  Once again I feel my body heat up and I feel such pleasure from his touch…I almost moan, but then I hold it back, and I simply blush.  He then says: “Actually, there’s something I need your help with.  Come with me.”  I simply nod and blush even more as I realize that he’s still holding my hand.  We go out of Starbucks and keep walking.  I then ask: “Where are we going?”  He then says:  “We’ll go to my car and then we go towards the center of the city.”  I nod and then we get in his car, and he starts the engine.  He then says:  “Also, there’s something I’ve been meaning to ask you.  I forgot to ask you about it yesterday.”  I nod and reply: “What is it?”  He then sighs, and I detect some nervousness in his voice.  He then says: “You wouldn’t believe me if I told you.  But anyways, look, lately, there’s this old man, well, I’m beginning to think it’s some sort of ghost, named Bertram.  He’s been telling me that you and I are linked.”  I then gasp and say:  “He’s talked to me too!  He told me that something would happen to me, but he didn’t say when or where it would happen.”  We then both remain silent, and then he says:  “There’s something at work here that we don’t understand.  What it may be, I don’t know, but we met each other for a reason.”  I nod silently and then he keeps driving.  My mind drifts to Vincent, and I shudder when I think of the way he touches me.  I crave his touch…I want more.  But at the same time, I want to hold back, because I don’t want to screw things up between us.  I then blush and my body starts to heat up slowly.  My body craves his touch.  I then think to myself: “Are you insane!?  What the hell is the matter with you!?”  But another part of me says: “Rose, he’ll be the one that heals your heart.”  I then struggle to maintain calm, and I brush off the thoughts.
 
(Start Song Here)
Then I feel the car come to a stop, and then Vincent says: “We’re here.  Now come on.”  He then holds my hand again and we walk for a few minutes, until he tells me to stop.  Then I hear footsteps coming from the horizon.  Then I hear another man’s voice in the distance, and Vincent whispers to me and says: “Stay sharp, and stay behind me.”  I nod and get behind Vincent, and then I hear the other man’s voice talking in a somewhat mocking tone.  The man says:  “Well well, if it isn’t the great detective Vincent!  What brings you here to this part of the city?”  I then hear Vincent growl angrily and he says: “Cut the crap, I’m here to ask you if you know a relative of a man named Wade.”  I then hear the other man laugh and then he yells:  “Oh no, Mister L here is going to hunt down Wade’s relatives!  The horror!”  Then I hear other men laughing, apparently there are a lot of thugs accompanying the man.”  Vincent then says: “If you don’t talk, I’ll make you.”  The other man then says:  “Save your breath detective, even if we did know about Wade’s relatives, we wouldn’t rat him out to you!”  Then Vincent says: “Tell me what you know now!”  The other man says: “Over my dead body!”  Then Vincent cracks his knuckles and says: “That can be arranged!”
 
I then scream and command them to stop.  A sudden silence looms over all of us.  Then I go in front of Vincent and speak to the man and say:  “Please, we need your help.  A little boy named Tyler was murdered by one of Wade’s relatives, and we need to bring him to justice.  If you would help us, we’d be extremely grateful.”  I hear Vincent whisper my name: “Rose…”  A few brief seconds of silence then breaks out into laughter, as all the men surrounding us laugh mockingly.  Then the man says: “Awww, the poor little woman here needs to know who killed her little friend!  Isn’t that touching?”  Then I hear Vincent growl angrily and he gently puts me aside and then he shouts to the other man: “This isn’t a joke!  Stop this crap!”  Then the laughter stops, and then the other man says: “Make me stop pretty boy.”  And then, in a split second, I hear a sickening crack of bones, and then the other man screams in pain:  “Ahhh, the bastard broke my jaw!  Kill him!”  Then I hear them come closer and then I say: “Oh boy.”  But, good thing I have my trust knife and Vincent with me.  All I can say is, let the funfest being, bring it on!
(End Song Here)
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I hope you guys enjoyed the chapter!  The next two chapters will be from Vincent’s point of view.  Stay tuned, and please keep commenting on my story! :D
 
Oh, and by the way, here are some drawings I made of the characters!
This is Vincent! post-33238-0-15267900-1364426467_thumb.jpg  This is Wade! post-33238-0-40589400-1364426489_thumb.jpg  And this is Derek! post-33238-0-03858400-1364426507_thumb.jpg
 
I hope you guys enjoy! :D
Edited by Sesshomaru

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