Lu Xun 2,069 Posted January 8, 2013 you said it wizard! NIce work with newest chapter! it was really fast to read, even though it wasn't too short (it really is annoying to read never ending chapters) Also, this chapter kinda surprised me, I have read lot of your stories, but chapter 1 had some really different plot twists compared to your another stories! Keep up with good work! Keep it up! I really want to see what happens next! LUUUU XXXUUUNNNN I'm sorry I couldn't reply earlier today D: I was in a hurry to school. I hope you aren't mad or anything :c Anyways, I loved the story so far! I think you really brought out that 'feel' of war there, can't wait to know what happens next! btw, when will we get the next chapter? Thanks, guys! I was intending to write it last night, but then I had to go out with my mom... But it's highly likely that it'll come later today! 1 Indecypher reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted January 9, 2013 You asked, and here it is! Again, I'm still on my iPhone, so sorry for any small mistake! Enjoy Chapter 2.1 - The Consequences Two years after the war's end, Jiin's soon, Jorge, was already an eighteen-years-old man, even though he looked a lot older than that. The cause might have been the fact that he grew up in the middle of an endless war, but the consequences were pretty noticeable. His once beautiful, colorful, blue eyes had become sad, cold and frightened. Unlike his father, he did not feel any pain at all for those who had died during the war--or rather--he thought they were just fulfilling their duty as citizens of that Kingdom. Mercy was something he could never understand. To him, if your enemy lets you live after winning against you, they would only be mocking you. In order to protect himself and his father's authority and power, he learned how to use a sword at a very young age. Before the war ended, he started learning how to wield it properly with one of the best fighters of that time. And he learnt a lot--at the point of which he started patrolling the Kingdom and facing personally whoever tried to destroy the "peace" created after the war's end. In a rainy night, Jiin summoned Jorge so they could have a serious conversation from father to son. "I've seen how you act, my son... Don't be such a heartless. We have feelings, we all cry--there's no exception." said Jiin, calmly trying to understand his son's mind. "Your highness, I have feelings of course, but I learned that unless I pretend they do not exist, I'll be crushed by this world's cruelty." replied Jorge, showing that he could never forgive nor forget all that had happened in the past. "But life's like that, my precious son. We can't flee from our problems like that--we've gotta face them head-on." said Jiin with a sad yet calm tone. Before Jiin could hear any reply from his son, a soldier entered the room, apologizing for troubling them at that late hour of the night, but unfortunately, he had come to report that bandits had attacked the castle. Swiftly, Jorge left his father's chamber and reunited with Kyre, the Commander of the Royal Knights. Kyre was a twenty-years-old man, secretly raised by Jiin as his own son. Years ago, the boy had earned his admiration. The boy had been through so many bad things--he lost his entire family during an accident--but even so, he never gave up hope. Feeling pity of that young boy, who had lost everything, he decided to give him a decent life. Unfortunately, Kyre and Jorge didn't like each other. Kyre had also fallen in love with Jiin's daughter, Rafaella, a lovely seventeen-years-old girl, with sparking blue eyes, black hair and the most beautiful smile on this Earth--or so that was how she was seen by Kyre. A hundred soldiers were gathered in the War Room, about to fight back the bandits and save the King and his Castle from any and every threat they could possess. 5 Shera Wizard, dusk, Weiss and 2 others reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
teh lazy prince Xylek 1,559 Posted January 9, 2013 nice chapter man! i WANT MMMMMMMMOOOOOOORRRRRRREEEEEEEEE also i love when the title of the chapter is used in the chapter! awesome Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Weiss 8,279 Posted January 9, 2013 Another great chapter! Nice work! Can't wait for the next one! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Indecypher 495 Posted January 9, 2013 I think i'm thrown off on the timeline due to reading your other stories. "they will be only making fun of you" might sound better grammatically if you said "they would only be mocking you" Unless you count grammar as an iphone mistake. 1 Lu Xun reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Shera Wizard 2,736 Posted January 9, 2013 I think i'm thrown off on the timeline due to reading your other stories. "they will be only making fun of you" might sound better grammatically if you said "they would only be mocking you" Unless you count grammar as an iphone mistake. I think 'mocking at you' would suit better And wonderful as ever Lu Xun! Well, yeah, had a few eeny-weeny mistakes here and there, but definitely good Sorry for latepost again Dx 3 Lu Xun, coolwings and Weiss reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted January 9, 2013 Thanks for the tips, guys. I edited a few things here and there. Chapter 2.2 might come today. I was thinking about maybe doing a timeline soon so you don't get lost! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Indecypher 495 Posted January 9, 2013 I think 'mocking at you' would suit better And wonderful as ever Lu Xun! Well, yeah, had a few eeny-weeny mistakes here and there, but definitely good Sorry for latepost again Dx I've never heard that before, but then again I can't read. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sora's Baby 729 Posted January 9, 2013 Good job! I enjoyed the chapter like always. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
