qwigoqwaga 7 Posted February 25, 2010 the beginning or ending of a chapter?: "He was back in his black realm. The sound of gunshots was everywhere. He could hear the bullets. Popping out of the barrels, whizzing past his head. The black battlefield was illuminated by their ambient sound. But, there was still nothing around. Then, out of the blackness, he could make out a single bullet. All the other sounds vanished, like the wind blowing away dust. This timeless zone held its breath, as time seemed to stop and Jason realized the bullet was still closer now. Hurtling right at him." What do you think it'd be better as? (I know it's just a paragraph, so if either, I'd have to add a little bit more) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
No 0 Posted February 25, 2010 Depends on if you want the chapter to end with susspence or not. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
eentje 0 Posted February 26, 2010 The beginning. It pulls you in immediately and that's exactly what you need to keep people interested. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Cricket 1,180 Posted February 26, 2010 I agree with eentje. It should begin at the start of the story, like a foreshadowing paragraph you know? It would fit and execute its use well if you start with it at the beginning. Then, you can go on and add more to the story, like the background info. Usually paragraphs like that, begin the building blocks of the story. After reading that, I wonder what the person has been through to deserve that kind of experience. Edit: I think this would belong in the Writing category... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
qwigoqwaga 7 Posted March 1, 2010 Dx this doesn't help, as I've also had plenty of people say it'd be best as the end of a chapter.....I might use it as a beginning though because, me being the fail writer I am has no real plan....I don't plan each chapter, I just write it...so beginning might be good Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
