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Text A Butterfly in the Ashes

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I love this :) I'm excited to see where the story goes, and find out more about who this girl is. I also like the format you wrote this in; where you list changes in setting, the character's actions, etc. I've thought about doing the same thing before, so it was great seeing done already

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I love this :) I'm excited to see where the story goes, and find out more about who this girl is. I also like the format you wrote this in; where you list changes in setting, the character's actions, etc. I've thought about doing the same thing before, so it was great seeing done already

 

I write this way because I want to become a screenplay writer. It's a fairly natural writing format for me considering how close I was to the format before I even began researching how to format a screenplay. lol Thank you for the read and the comment! If you are interested my signature and profile has a list of links for my other stories. This way while you're waiting for me to post another chapter for this story you can occupy yourself with some of my other ones. xD

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Ok the first chapter I thought the elderly man was gonna kidnap her and chapter 2 this makes me nervous because I hate being the new student

 

So far this story is getting very intresting Nice work Ertyx

 

lol Nah, he was just trying to be friendly. Yeah, being the new kid sucks pretty hard. Thanks! xD

 

Intriguing...

 

Thanks! xD

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CHAPTER 3:

 

 

EXT. THE PRINCIPAL’S OFFICE

 

(Principal Hamayo stops outside his office and skims over the packet he has been handed. He shakes his head in disgust and thrusts the forms back to into the hands of his colleague. Hamayo enters his office and slams the door in the teacher’s face, much to his anger. The teacher crumples up the packet and storms off. Marina watches from around the corner, trying not to be seen. She looks around and then slips out from behind the corner, following the wall of lockers to the Principal’s office. She slows down and peers into the office, trying to get a good view of the layout. Hamayo is inside yelling at his secretary. He shakes his head and turns around entering another door, leading to his actual office. Once Marina passes the door, she speeds up and makes her way to the nearby window. She looks behind her and sees a bathroom. Many of the students have left the hallway that she is on and no one is watching her. Marina places her hands on the one window that has been propped open. She pushes it up, opening it further. Marina leans down and opens up her backpack. She pulls out a small device and presses a series of buttons, which causes many of the security cameras within the immediate vicinity to malfunction and shut down. She puts the device back into her backpack and pulls out a group of small firecrackers, while trying to remain cautious in order to not draw any attention. She peels off a small slip of paper on the bottom side of the firecrackers. She leans out the window and places it on the outer wall of the school. The firecrackers stick to the wall with no signs of falling off. Marina pulls a lighter out of her back pack and takes a quick glance around. Even fewer students are in the hallway and none are looking at her. She lights the end of the firecrackers and then quickly makes her way toward the bathroom. On the way she zips up her backpack and slings it over her shoulders. A few seconds after Marina enters the bathroom, the firecrackers launch from the wall straight into the courtyard. Because of class beginning soon there is no one in the courtyard to see such an amazing sight. However, the explosion is quite loud, drawing the attention of any students in the nearby halls. Principal Hamayo’s secretary hurries out of her office and rushes over to the window. Principal Hamayo quickly follows her and is flabbergasted to see such an explosion. He hurries down the hall, trying to get outside to see what has caused the commotion. Marina peers out from the bathroom and then hurries over to the office, slipping past the cracked door. She hurries into Principal Hamayo’s office and looks around. She sees a locked cabinet in the back corner of the room. She hurries over and pulls her backpack off her shoulders. Marina reaches inside and pulls out a decoder and attaches it to the lock. She moves the thumb pieces around, quickly deciphering the code. She unlocks the cabinet and finds a large stash of assorted wine, liquor, and beer. She pulls out each one, individually and opens them up. She pulls a small vial out of her backpack and pours a small drop into each of the already opened bottles. She places each one back into their correct spot and relocks the cabinet. She gathers up the vial and decoder, placing them back in her backpack and then quickly exits the office. She turns and walks down the hall, as if nothing ever happened.)

INT. MARINA’S ART CLASS

 

(The teacher makes her way to the door, but much to her surprise Marina slips in at the last second.)

Teacher: And who might you be?

 

Marina: …Um, Marina du Vale…

 

(Marina looks around, nervously, waiting for everyone to stop staring at her.)

Teacher: Ah, you must be the new student. Try to be on time next time, okay?

 

(Marina nods her head and then makes her way to a table at the back of the room. She sits down across from the boy that she nearly stabbed with a pencil. He smiles at her, but looks away a bit unsure of whether he should be afraid or happy to see her. She smiles back, although still a bit shyly.)

INT. PRINCIPAL HAMAYO’S OFFICE

 

(Hamayo enter his office and quickly sits down. He rubs his face, annoyed with how his day has started.)

Hamayo: Damn kids can’t give me even a moment of peace and quiet…

 

(Hamayo reaches to his liquor cabinet and unlocks it, taking one of the bottles of wine. He pours himself a glass and drinks the smallest drop, just to ease his tension. As he tastes the wine, he slowly desires another taste… and another… and another… until he blows through most of his liquor cabinet. Hamayo leans back in his chair quite happy with himself, giggling like a fool. Until he drifts off… to his alcohol induced death.)

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I write this way because I want to become a screenplay writer. It's a fairly natural writing format for me considering how close I was to the format before I even began researching how to format a screenplay. lol Thank you for the read and the comment! If you are interested my signature and profile has a list of links for my other stories. This way while you're waiting for me to post another chapter for this story you can occupy yourself with some of my other ones. xD

 

That's great :) I want to do the same thing, so that explains why I made that connection. In the future I'm gonna try writing a project in this format, after seeing it done, and I'll definitely look at those other stories. Thanks for the inspiration, and don't stop the great work :)

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Why are you so good at writing!! xD

 

At first I was like oh no this is sounding a bit like Twilight, but when Marina bet the crap out of that boy I was like: "Yus! Thank you Ertyx."

 

Continue...

 

Well there will be some romance. lol It's just also an action story.

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CHAPTER 4:

 

INT. MARINA’S ART CLASS-MORNING

 

(Marina is sitting in her seat, staring at the desk in front of her, clearly not paying attention to the teacher’s lecturing. The boy in front of her is resting his chin against his hand, with his elbow planted firmly on his desk. He glances away from the teacher and stares at Marina. Suddenly the class hears the sound of the intercom.)

 

Secretary: …Uh…

 

(The secretary sounds distressed and, quite possibly, on the verge of throwing up.)

 

Secretary: Due to unforeseen… circumstances. School is closed for the rest of the day. Thank you… and have a great day.

 

(The intercom goes off and the class sits there, confused, but only for a moment. The students each stand up and quickly pack up their things, much to the teacher’s annoyance. Marina slowly packs her things, under the gaze of the shy boy across from her. She makes her way to the door. The boy finishes packing his things and slowly follows her out of the classroom.)

 

EXT. TOCHIGI HIGH SCHOOL-MORNING

 

(Marina exits the front doors of the school and passes a group of paramedics who are quickly making their way into the school. She appears unconcerned with them as she makes her way toward the front parking lot. She pulls a cell phone out of her pocket and begins dialing her Uncle’s number. The boy walks past her and looks back, shyly.)

 

Boy: Um… have a good day…

 

(Marina looks at him, confused, as he quickly turns away, blushing. She slowly puts the phone to her ear.)

 

INT. MARINA’S UNCLE’S APARTMENT

 

(Marina is sitting at the table eating a sandwich and reading The Hunger Games. Her Uncle walks in from the other room, holding a notebook.)

 

Uncle: I just got done talking to your school. Sadly… your principal was found in his office… dead. They said it was from alcohol poisoning. It’s sad…

 

(Her Uncle turns away and walks over to the fridge.)

 

Uncle: But what kind of educator gets drunk on the job?

 

(Her uncle sighs as he pulls a can of root beer out of the fridge. Marina continues to read, seemingly unconcerned with her Uncle. Her Uncle walks up to the table and smiles at her.)

 

Uncle: I… uh… got you something today.

 

(Her uncle sits down and places the notebook on the table. She looks up from her book and stares at the notebook, confused.)

 

Uncle: It’s a diary. A lot of girls your age have them.

 

Marina: …What do I do with it?

 

(Her uncle shrugs, sort of at a loss for words.)

 

Uncle: You just write about your day… and how it made you feel?

 

Marina: Why?

 

Uncle: Sometimes it’s just good to get your feelings out.

 

Marina: …Who am I writing it for?

 

Uncle: …You. No one’s gonna read it but you.

 

Marina: …I’m not sure I get it.

 

Uncle: Look… you just write down anything you want to and then you close it up and keep it somewhere safe in your room. Trust me… it’s something that’ll help you deal with adapting to a new life.

 

(Marina glances back down at the notebook and then returns to reading The Hunger Games.)

 

INT. MARINA’S ROOM-AFTERNOON

 

(Marina is sitting at the desk in her room, with her diary opened in front of her. She has a pencil in her hand, but seems fairly confused. She looks at the wall in front of her and spaces out for a moment. She looks back down and puts the tip of the pencil to the paper. She writes “Today’s assassination was a success. Hamayo is dead, although I am unsure of when I will be returning to Brazil. Today made me feel… odd.” Marina sits there for a moment and then closes the notebook. She gets up and lies down on her bed. She takes off her glasses and stares at the ceiling. Suddenly, her phone beeps. She picks it up and reads over a text from a contact known as “Hawk.”)

 

Hawk: You will need to remain in Japan for at least another few weeks. The information as to why is classified. In the mean time, you will be given another assignment. I will text you the details within two hours.

 

(Marina replies to the text with “Understood, father.”)

 

INT. THE HAWK’S OFFICE

 

(The room is filled with drawers and paintings. At the back of the room sits a desk, occupied by an older and distinguished man. The man has long gray hair and no facial hair, with a few defining wrinkles resting on his forehead. He is writing something on a document, clearly focused on the task at hand. A knock is heard at the door.)

 

Hawk: Enter.

 

(A young man with a long brown pony-tail and a goatee enters the room. He is wearing a black cloak, with the hood down. The Hawk looks up and sets his pen down, quite confused.)

 

Hawk: What is it?

 

Young man: The Crow was here.

 

Hawk: What?! What could he have possibly wanted?

 

Young man: I’m not sure. Our men caught glimpse of him in the woods making his way here. They alerted me and I intervened just outside the gates. I held him off for approximately ten minutes, but he eventually fled… like a coward.

 

Hawk: This doesn’t bode well.

 

(The Hawk turns and faces the wall, stroking his chin.)

 

Young man: But father… I faced him and he is clearly not as lethal as they say. He was far from a challenge and I’m sure that if I was to meet him again, I could strike him down with ease.

 

Hawk: You idiot. He clearly wasn’t interested in killing you, otherwise he would have. I know the Crow… and you are no match.

 

(The Hawk stands up and seems quite frustrated. The young man appears choked up at the Hawk’s words.)

 

Young man: But father… I’m positive that I could end him…

 

Hawk: Enough. Contact the Wolf and tell him that the Crow was here. He will tell you what to do.

 

Young man: …What of the Butterfly?

 

Hawk: I have already contacted her and informed her that she will remain in Japan until further notice. I will not allow her to get caught up in this mess. As I’ve said, you are no match for the Crow… and neither is she. Best that she is left where she is.

Edited by Ertyx

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