KinataKeyblade 4 Posted August 4, 2012 Yo Hello ! I started to meking a Fanfciton of Kingdom Hearts....so i hope u like it its bout Roxas 's new life....but is it really a new life??? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kirie 3,489 Posted August 4, 2012 Ello and for your question, yes. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Decimo 243 Posted August 4, 2012 I won't know if I like it or not until you post it. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KinataKeyblade 4 Posted August 4, 2012 yeah sorry okay "Roxas were going to have to leave Twillight Town..."said His Older brother Cloud "...Why?i wanna be here... Pence, Ollete..."Said roxas holding tears "Sorry Roxas...can you please understand me?" "...alright ..." XXX "so Roxas...Your really leaving huh????"Asked Pence "Yeah...its decided..." Roxas Said "Hey dont forget bout us just cuz we were friends 2 months ago!"Yelled Hayner Happily "Hey Same Thing!" "okay I have to go now !"ROxas Said They all hugged,they all Said goodbyes "Bye Guys!!!!!!!"Yelled Roxas while running XXX "hey Cloud...im ready..." "...sure your minds made up???"Asked Cloud before getting tickets "Yup"ROxas said simply "OKay..."Said CLoud buying ticket ...Goodbye Hayner...Pence...Ollete... ....Goodbye..... .........Twillight Town....... XXX"has 'it'...awaken yet..."said someone with a cloak "no....its hasnt been awaken...apparently....Roxas doesnt..know..about ...'The Eye Of Darkness'"said a professor with a coat "soon he'll know...and...uses its power....and when he does...we will control him"Said the frist man again "Dont get your hopes up "Said a evil man will Dark long hair and yellow eyes "I..im sorry ...Chief Xehanort..." "I must warn you chief...you'll regret killing that boy......"Said The first man "....ill see about that...being the only one survived in the klan...of Raggs....And having the eye of arkness within him...I can control...because...im the one...that teach him everything...." Soo is it good??? ^w^" Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KinataKeyblade 4 Posted August 4, 2012 NAh its not.... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Decimo 243 Posted August 4, 2012 The forum to post fanfictions is this one: http://kh13.com/forum/forum/17-writing/ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hunter Hawk 392 Posted August 4, 2012 It's very well written, I really liked it. Maybe it will be a bit better if you also describe what's happening around, for story not be just made from converstation. But I can't wait to see another chapter! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KinataKeyblade 4 Posted August 4, 2012 okay on the next story X3 ROXAS POV "Hey Roxas Were here!" Shouting at me "YEah yeah ....'' i said sleepy . i was sleeping at the train. "What is-...Mother of pearl....Its so cool!" i shouted in train "SHuussh!!!!" HIssed Cloud "Sorry..."i said "Well okay now go to school i already packe your bag and here's the note''he said throwing me a bag Cloud....your more like a parent...an less .....like a Brother..... "Well of ya go!" he said kicking me forward "Yeah yeah....jeez.....what a Gramps..." i muttered uner my breathe..but it was loud he could hear it "What did you say?" he said smirk with face of mad man "Nothing BYe!"i said running torward the school where cloud gave the note XXX"...PAepo Fruit HighSchool????"I asked in my mind. i was on the front of the gate of a school..the gate..was...shape-fruit??"eh what the heck...."i said going to class...which i dunno how i got there IN CLASS X3 "Alright Students! this is our new classmate.Roxas Strife" Yelled the teacher,,he was...pink...and...flowered??? "Nice to meet ya"i said simply For a reason i dunno the class was quiet as ..death XXX"Hey Riku...Whaddaya think about the New kid?" whispers a brunette (roxas did not hear the whispers)".....he looks like he has a secret ill give ya that" whispers back a Silver haired boy "yeah.,..and he looks like me" "alright ROxas! sit between ..ah! the chesnut boy and the grampa hair boy!" Said the teacher TACK!! (di were hear something crack??uh oh...) "teacher,,,THIS IS GRAMPA HAIR ITS SILER YOU FLOWERMANIAC!!!!" Yelled angrily the sliver boy(Told ya ) "Then neve-" "No its too late!!!! he's already between us SIr!" said The brunette puling Roxas "Hi My names SOra Hikari and this is Riku Totsuyama!"Said the brunette "Hi nice to meet ya"i said smilling OH dAMN I JUST BLOW MY PERSONALITY!!!!!!!! "......Your really cool u have personalties than one!!!"Said Sora Yeah and your too naive .... AFTER CLASS ITS GONN GET CRAZY X3 "Oh yeah Roxas Sorry bout back in class " Said Sora "Nah its kay"I response "Grr...that flowermaniac is gonna pay" Riku demanded himself "Ahhaha-"We were walking through classes to get to gym..but then.. "ROXAS!!!!!" yelled someone from back That voice.....its....its!!!! "YOUR BACK !!!!!!!!!" "Ven Quit It ! i Cant breathe !!!!!!" yelled(lol Roxas Namine and Ven are cousins!!ven the second ater cloud Namine is the last!) "...Yeah sorry i just missed i havent seen ya for 2 years!!!" "whee's namine???"i asked "she's in artclass" :oh i see" "Ven-"Said a Black hair like sora and has yellow eyes "Holy pineplales!!!! two Vens?! no wait your his brother Roxas"Said HImself "Ye-yeh..." Damn im not used to be being crwoded ..better disappear! "look a Shotting Star !!!!"i yelled everyone look atthe window and i ran XXX"HEH!!???" yelled Sora Shocked"Where did he go??" asked Riku "...he wsa the fastest of the family..." said VEn "he had to go to milittarry since he was 4 years old....He had been on a WarZone by himself....He kille poeple..thousands..." "...." XX"Hah..hah.."Panted ROxas"I finally got away...if i been there to long....i couldve kille themm...." Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KinataKeyblade 4 Posted August 5, 2012 man this is bad XC Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KinataKeyblade 4 Posted August 23, 2012 Hey ya People if ya readed the First ans 2 chpter...i decided to rewritte it...i feel its not good enough....well hope ya people Like it X3 Ist Distrik ...Barsbug Empire "Hey look ts him!CHairman Ansem's favorite student " a Boy said. A Boy was walking in the school area hearing whispers about himself "Always wearing a sour look on his face...he doesnt even say hi" another one said "haha..." The Boy ignores it "Hhaha...Good Morning Young Master Roxas Klein" They all sarcasticly and teased "Can That CHibi even keep up in classes??" Hey hEY!"One Whispered"did ya know he was once a slave?" "No Way!!!haha!Shhssh he'll hear You" i can hear perectly IDIOTSS...You bastards should sstop Saying things!!! Roxas said to them in thought ...If i hear another one say that... "GOOD MORNING FAMOUS TOUNG MASTER 100% PERFECT!!!"Someone Yelled PAtting Roxas's SHoulder "SHUT IT AXEL!!!"I Yelled Angrily Hitting his head"Ow ow ow...Ya knew it was me???"Axel asked happily "after being your Friend for a whole year how coul i not?!"I asked angrily"Ah FOcus FOcus!" "???Well cmon we gotta go"he said CLASSROOM!!! "Well everyone .The Army's che executive will be here tomorrow for the graduate examination.Please keep that in mind"The TEacher said,he goes to Roxas "Roxas you never came to my practical skill lessons ..that makes me sad.." he sighed "...i was excused from every general lessons"i said simply "Haha what a pity!"a student whispered.Axel USed a button then THUMP!Tons of books was gone the teacher it was from shuuri's desk ( Shuuri is one who whispered about Roxas ) "Sensei...Shuuri has some Bad Notes about you." axel said "So i see.."he has a bad aura "Axel ya didnt have to do that ya know..." i said "yeah yeah whatever mister Perfect" He said and the last word he said it..sarcasticly.... TACK!!!!.....(uh ohO.o) "...AXEL!!!!!!" i Yelled with a death aura in me chasing Axel to the field Roxas vs Axel in the NEXT CHAPTER X3 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites