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Seems interesting!

I like the story so far and I'd love to see more. c:

 

Thank You,Part 2 should be out by the end of week.I have exams this week some story might be delayed.

 

Will there be tommy guns? It ain't Noir without a Typewriter!

 

Most likely i have little to no idea where am taking the story.

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:) I'm following this in return for your support of my story. Eagerly awaiting part two!

 

I'd like to see more, it's pretty good so far.

 

Sounds interesting... I want to see next part

 

Thanks for Support

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Chapter 2

“500,000 a member,So will you take the job”

“ I won’t be here if i was not going to take the job”

“ So you have no problem killing your former teammates”

“ Kill or Be Killed and i hate those guys anyway”

I walked out of there,Not making eye contract with anyone i almost wanted to kill DC for setting me up like that.Not telling me in advanced that they are people i have to kill.First thing i have to do is get some sleep and find out where my group is.I ended up getting a hotel that’s decent enough to sleep in.

 

8.5 Years ago

“So you want to join my group,Lester”

“Why not if the pays good and i still owe you for happen a while ago,Max”

“It’s perfectly fine so i let you meet the rest of them then there are waiting for us”

 

This is my first time working in group usually i work by myself or with a partner to get my jobs done.I feel when the group gets to big people get greedy and back-stab there members but Max trusts these guys so i will put my doubts behind me.Max and i drive to some hideout that looks like dive but i guess if it means that the pigs don’t find us then that’s fine by me.

 

“Try to make good impression we don’t want there to be any hitches when we get are jobs done.”

“Fine i will try to get along with these guys”

(He opens a door to this shack hopefully i don’t get anyone yelling surprise)

“Lester met the team so far we have Cowboy who is are main driver,Cell and Lexi who plan are jobs and Tom who is sharpshooter like you.

 

(The team seems good and capable of getting a job done by looks of it.Nobody really stand out to me,Cowboy seems like he does not belong on this scene but for what hear he is one of the fastest drivers out there,Cell and Lexi seem like your average pretty dames but they do look cut-out for this line of work and Tom seems like quiet person who was forced into this line of work but something seems off about the group and wish knew what.)

Cell:“What’s your code-name new guy"

Lester: “It’s Deadshot”

 

Present Day

It’s been while since i spent a full day in this city, i should go see if Fred still owns the gun-shop on 35th street.Walking in this city it reminds me why i hatred this place.(I hear guy walking behind me,He‘s seems nervous by the he's breathing)

“Hey give me your wallet or i will you... kill you” (He pulls out his pistol pointing it at my head it’s pathetic looking one at that)

“Do it come on i dare you,Kill me” (He’s breathing deeply and his hands are shaking this is probably his first time he’s threatened to kill someone,He’s young,only teen by looks of it and his whole body seems like going to fall over,it’s pretty sad what this city does to people)

“Hurm... my turn” (I pull out my Colt Single Action Army,it’s an old gun but it gets job done)(I point the gun right at that punks forehead,he’s panicking and most likely thinking he's going to die and i want to kill to him,I really do)

“Please i sorry...don’t kill me...Please..(He’s crying,It almost makes me little sad)

(I lower my gun)“Get the hell out of here padre before i change my mind”(I let him live,I can’t get any more attention to myself and he’s just a boy)

(I end up getting to the gunshop without any more problems)

“Your not dead yet”

“And it’s nice to see you too,Fred”

“What brings you back to the city”

“I got a job to kill my former team and i need to know where they are and you won’t mind selling me some firearms while your at would you buddy”

“Do think that’s wise after what happened”

“Hurm...Am not really sure but i need the cash and don’t mind killing some of those a-holes”

“Who hired you for the job”

(After while of a back and fourth conversation he told me that DC and Aaron own this city now and i should be careful working with them.They are trying to get my old team after they stole 500,000$ from one of there business’s sometime ago.He also told me where my former gang usually is at place called Undertow almost outside of city where it’s easy to blend in.I bought around 6 guns ranging from pistol to tommy’s and put them in my bag.Fred is nice enough guy for what he does and i know him from last time i was here.He seems to know a lot of what’s happening in this city and he gives me good guide to what i need to know to have the an advantage against them and it appears now that my team even found replacements.

 

 

Chapter 3 will most likely be Flashback.

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Chapter 3

I end up making it to Undertow it’s real shaded distract where anything flies.I stop at a bar called the Maltese Falcon.I keep telling myself why i took this job.To support my family...my wife wants to have another baby but we don’t have the money,We can barley support are first child.I want to give her everything she needs but i work at dead end job so i took one last killing job to give us everything we will need.She did not want me to do it,She kept telling me we don’t need the money but what kind of father can’t support their own family.I told her it was something i had to do.I told her i would make it out alive and i would never take job like this again.I just hope i get to see her and my daughter again.

 

7 Years Ago

Are group is coming along nicely,We have not screw up any jobs yet and we are making good amount of money.I am really starting to trust these guys and we have had a lot good times with each other but my buddy Max is hurting lately.His family recently got killed in a car accident and he was only one to survive it.He hardly even got scratch on him.He told me he can’t get any sleep because whenever he dreams he goes back to that night of the accident where a driver t-bone their car killing his wife and their two kids.The night plays over and over again in his head and he can’t anything to stop it,They’re going back to their house after watching a movie at theater he puts his kids in there seats and does not even get to say goodbye to them.We were trying to cheer up again so we took him to club called KH13 it recently opened just sometime ago to get the accident off his mind.

 

Max:“ I found out who the driver was”

Deadshot: “Who was it”

Max: “He calls himself Grimmjow he’s has a gang on Sunset Blvd. Am planning on killing him tonight”

Nobody said anything for short time.I don’t think anyone knew what to say to him.

Cell: “Do you think that’s a wise idea,He might have not done it on purpose”(He looked at her like he was going kill her)

Max: “This man destroy my life.He killed everything that i loved,I don’t care if he did purpose or not i have to return favour.So will you guys help me?”

Deadshot: “ I’m in”

Cell: “I’m sorry i can’t.Grimmjow has at least 25 people in his group.It’s suicide mission”

Tom: “I’m Out”

Cowboy: “ I don’t feel like dying tonight,Sorry I’m Out”

Lexi: “I’ll Go”

Max: “Then this last time i’m seeing you cowards again then”

I understand why they did not do it.The odds were 50:1 for even one of us to make it out alive.We walked out out of the bar Max did not even say word he didn’t even look at them.They said Good Luck to us and that was last time i saw those three again.

 

We stop at Fred’s gun-shop picked up some Tommy’s,Shotguns and Pistols we also got some hand grenades.Max’s plan was we shoot everything in sight and burn the place to the ground.

Max: Thanks for coming here guys.

Deadshot: No Problem

Lexi: You would have done same for me

Grimmjow was having a party on Sunset Blvd tonight.He had around 25 guards and around 100 guests at his party.We got out of the car.We were getting close to front the door.He had two guarding it.Me and Max both pulled out are silencer and shot the two guards in the head.He was first to walk in,He told us he had to kill Grimmjow.We got noticed the second we walked in.We hid behind the walls leading to next room.Lexi was making sure no one would sneak up on us.This was biggest firearms fight i’ve ever gotten into.Max tossed in couple of grenades to take down the numbers of people against us and guest’s at the party panicked.A fire was catching in the house now,The smoke was making it hard to breath and see.We continued to fight though until Max told us to get out of the house.

 

Deadshot: Are you coming with us?

Max: No i need to make sure Grimmjow dies.Goooo!

Lexi and i ran out of the house.We were tired and exhausted.I heard the Police sirens.They were going to be here in maybe 3-5 minutes.I saw some guards coming at us i got shot few times but i tried to ignore that.I shot back my aim was not as good as wanted into be.I was worried i was going to die and Lexi did not look that good either.I needed to get her to a hospital.I finally got into the car i did not see any more guards and saw house burn to the ground and about half guest’s made it out live.Lexi looks really bad i think she got to much smoke in her system,she was unconscious. I got her to hospital while she was still live.A Doctor named Ivan looked after her.I knew she would be save here so i left.I later found out that she died of smoke inhalation if only i was little bit faster i could have safe her.Max and Grim were never heard of again i’m guessing they died as well.I left that city in a cab.The cab driver was wondering why was bleeding i told him to get him to a hospital outside of this city after that i could not forget what happened it haunted me.I moved to quiet town where i met woman who helped me forget my troubles.

 

Present day

Thinking about happen to Max. I've decided now that i need to get out of this city and go back to them.Nothing good ever happens here.I going to tell DC that i quit and he can kill them himself.I went to a phone booth and phone him.

“Hello how can help you”

Deadshot:“I want to speak to DC”

“May i ask whose calling”

“Deadshot”

“Ok please wait”

DC:“Hello there Deadshot have you killed them yet”

Deadshot:“ No and I'm not going to,You can kill them yourself”

DC:“ I'm Sorry to hear that but i had feeling you would do this so i got some insurance”

Deadshot:“What type of insurance”

Dc:“Your Wife and Daughter”

Deadshot:"How do i know your not lying”

DC:“I will put your wife on line right now”

“Lester,Kara and me are ok”

I hear her voice she crying.I can barley focus i can’t believe i let this happen.

Deadshot:“Tam........I’m Sorry,I let this happen.I lov

DC:“If you want to see her and you daughter again you will kill your old team.You have 24 hours or they die.Don’t even think about coming here and trying to kill me or Tam gets bullet in the head”

Deadshot:“If you touch even hair on either of them i will”

DC:“You’ll do nothing,Your out number and out gunned.Don’t worry i won’t touch them.I will hear for you less 24 hours hopefully”

I have to focus now.I have to get them out of my head,I won’t help me.I have to find my team and kill them,Get my family out here and get them somewhere safe.

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That post in itself was grammatically incorrect.

 

They're one-word sentences.

Series of statements of utter fact that make up a single compound fact.

So at what point was it grammatically incorrect?

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They're one-word sentences.

Series of statements of utter fact that make up a single compound fact.

So at what point was it grammatically incorrect?

 

Technically they are still incorrect when used in that format. One word sentences generally are only acceptable if someone says something, and someone answers "Why?" or something along those lines.

*foams at mouth*<== "THE" mouth c: Also, that is an incomplete statement, rendering it grammatically incorrect. But I digress.

 

When's the next chapter?

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Technically they are still incorrect when used in that format. One word sentences generally are only acceptable if someone says something, and someone answers "Why?" or something along those lines.

*foams at mouth*<== "THE" mouth c: Also, that is an incomplete statement, rendering it grammatically incorrect. But I digress.

 

When's the next chapter?

 

Ah, Lexi, you Nazi.

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Technically they are still incorrect when used in that format. One word sentences generally are only acceptable if someone says something, and someone answers "Why?" or something along those lines.

*foams at mouth*<== "THE" mouth c: Also, that is an incomplete statement, rendering it grammatically incorrect. But I digress.

 

When's the next chapter?

 

"The" is not needed in that sentence. What, am I going to foam from a mouth that's not mine?

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WHAT I DIE WHAT IS THIS.

 

otherwiseIenjoythisssc:

 

I am sorry i killed your character.

But remember

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I have not started writing it yet.With comics coming out today am going to be reading those.

 

They're one-word sentences.

Series of statements of utter fact that make up a single compound fact.

So at what point was it grammatically incorrect?

 

Sin CIty did it why can't i?

Thank You for your criticism.Also I did not re-edit chapter 3 my bad there.

Also your new name is Snowflame

 

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Nice story Deadshot

 

Thank You

 

Wow this is getting very interesting, very nice story xD

 

Thanks

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Chapter 4

 

Present Day

I try to remember what Fred told and block out what could possibly be happening my family.My former team is Cell,Tom,Cowboy with new replacements being John and Matthew.I try to find good enough Vantage Point to scope out members of the group i try to take my time so i don’t make mistakes don’t rush it even if in back of my head i have countdown clock playing knowing am running out of time.I can’t see anyone that looks familiar am wasting my time.Then i hear noise, look at arm because i feel surge pain going though it and it’s bleeding.I got bullet inn my arm almost right in my shoulder.I look around seeing who could have done that but i only know one person around here that could have done that and would want to kill me.

 

Sometime 8 Years Ago

Lexi: “I wonder who’s better gunslinger between you too”

Deadshot: “If i had to say i would place my money on self”

Tom: (quiet laugh) “Of course you would say that”

Cell: “You guys should have showdown tonight"

Deadshot: “That sound like fun”

Tom: “That's fine by me"

Later that Night

Lexi: “So here’s the rules you guys will act like it’s western showdown when i say draw you too will both pull your gun out of your holster and shoot the other guy.Don’t worry it’s rubber bullets so neither one of you will die but just don’t shoot them in head or neck.

Cell: “I bet 5$ on Tom"

Cowboy: “Deal”

Max: “I think there both going shoot each other in eyes and we going to need two new marksmen.”

Cell: “I won’t be surprised”

Lexi: “On my count"

Tom: “Good Luck”

Deadshot: “Thanks”

Lexi: “3”

None of us were schedule to do anything that night.So we just mess around each other sometimes like this

Lexi: “2”

Everyone seems to enjoy themselves when there’s no pressure on anyone

Lexi: “1”

I was planing on cheating on this but why not play fair there’s nothing on line

Lexi: “Draw”

Am not use to revolvers which gives him an edge but planing on getting better and that edge gave him victory something i don’t want to give me again

Tom: “I win”

Deadshot: “Damn,you almost got me in shoulder.Good job bud”

 

 

Back to Present Day

Damn it,I Blew it now i have Tom hunting me and i have no clue where he is.They must know that coming for them or he just playing game with me but i don’t have time for this.I second bullet comes right at me barely missing my head.I need to say focused.I know now that Tom’s shooting me from the other on the building on the right but i need cover.There’s hardly anything in sight so i take risk and just jump over to his building pulling out my revolver hopefully i’m little faster than him this time.Thankfully he’s reloading his sniper so i have a shot at this.I look at him and he’s smiling why is he smiling.

Deadshot: “Sorry Tom”

One of their new guys shoves me off the building but am able to grab him while falling taking him with me.He’s fighting me making sure i hit the ground first.I can’t really make out all details of guy but am able to pull out my swiss army knife from my pocket and stab him in the leg giving me an advantage.I end up making him hit the ground first killing him but saving me.It really hurts when i hit the ground i close my eyes for second and i almost forget where i am.Until i open them again and see from building above that Tom has his Sniper aimed right at my face.Am able to roll over but bullet still pierced my cheek.I pull out my revolver and we are both aiming at each other. I hear someone walking behind me i try to ignore them so i can focus on Tom and make sure i don’t take bullet to the head.The footsteps are getting closer and i see Cowboy in corner of my eye and before i can do anything i get hit in the head with baseball bat to the back of the head.

 

5.5 Years Ago

I’ve been in this quiet town for almost 2 years now.The only time i left was to go to Lexi funeral.Her parents wanted to know how this could have happened to their little girl.It was bad idea to go there,it brings me back to that day i have been trying to block out ever since it happened.I regret not getting more support or some goons to back us up it might have saved them.The old gang did not show up to the funeral i can’t say i was surprised.Now i try to drink my troubles away,I have nothing now.My friends are dead or should be dead in my mind.I got some crap job that pays the bills.My life did end up getting better though and for the first time in my life i could honestly say without doubt i was happy.

 

Present Time

John: “He’s waking up”

I can hardly think my head is pounding and i’m tied to a chair.I just try to figure out where i am and how long i’ve been out for.At least the whole gangs here.

Cell: “Who hired you”

Deadshot: “Max”

(She slapped me in face for that)

Cell: “Who hired you”

Deadshot: “Lexi”

(I got a punch in jaw for that answer)

I guess Fred told told them that i was going to kill him but didn’t tell them who hired me.

Cell: “Was it DC”

Deadshot: “Yes,He has my family hostage and he’s paying me 500,000$ a hit.If i don’t kill you guys in 24 Hours they die”

(After i said that they shortly left the room.I could not hear what they were saying)

Cowboy: “What do guys think we should do?"

John: “I say we kill him"

Cell: “Then DC sent’s someone better after us but if we work with Lester we might be able to get jump on him and end it."

Tom: “We also can’t let what happen to Lexi and Max happen to are group again’

John: “He Killed Matthew!"

Cowboy: “Well,He did push him off a building.I say we take a vote,Who wants to kill DC and help Deadshot?"

John: No

Tom: Yes

Cell: Yes

Cowboy: I also say yes

Cell: “Are you going to still help us,John?"

John: “Fine but still don’t trust him"

(They came out of after around 5 minutes of talking)

Cowboy: “Deadshot we have decided help you"

Deadshot: “How? Are you guys going to let me kill all of us"

Cell: “No,Your going to call DC saying you have kill us,Your going to make sure your family is safe then kiss them goodbye and put them in taxi.Then we will show up and help you kill DC or we kill you right now.What do you pick?

(By how good DC security is i die neither way but my answer is no brainier for me)

Deadshot: Let’s do it

 

Next part will be the Conclusion to the first arc(i think) and it will be most likely be done tomorrow.

Spoilers: Ending will be a Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid styled ending

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