Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted September 21, 2011 Hello, i am creating my own version of kh3d. here goes Chapter 1 Mickey, donald goofy set a course to Destiny Islands. "so sora, u made your mind up?"asked mickey "i am sure." said sora "lets go to where Yen Sid is. U 2 Riku." said Mickey They flew to the mysterious tower and yen sid told them the situation. " Sora, Riku, u have done well to repel darkness twice" said yen sid "it's nothing" said sora while folding his hand backwards "but, the real xehanort have came back." said yen sid "HUH" everyone said except mickey and yen sid "Why?" riku said "Xehanort heart and body have been restored so his whole will be complete" said yen sid "we gotta stop him now."said sora "it will take some time for him to be back. but first, i shall hold the mark of mastery"said yen sid "what is this mark of mastery?"said sora "it's a tradition for keyblade bearers like u to become true masters"said yen sid "even without taking the test, i will still pass"said sora riku turn his head down and said"i once chose to walk the path of darkness making me think i am not suitable to wield the keyblade. this test is good enough" "if u 2 get out of the dream, i shall call u masters"said yen sid "huh?"everyone said riku and sora passed out long intro right. got inspiration from trailer. hope u like it 1 Kairi_Fan_2k11 reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Isamu Kuno 2,512 Posted September 21, 2011 My only complaint is that you used too many abbreviations and not enough caps. Other than that it seem like a plausible traslation. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
TokyoMystify 4 Posted September 21, 2011 Pretty plausible. Keep it coming to keep me satisfied with a sane mind while the game comes out lol. Maybe fix a few words here and there....like "you". Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted September 21, 2011 cut me some slack p.s. what does plausible means? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
TokyoMystify 4 Posted September 21, 2011 cut me some slack p.s. what does plausible means? Can you believe I copy pasted that exact question on google, first link I see, some other guy asking the same thing and like 7 different answers. Google that s***. lol Edit: But I'm already here so, it means something probable. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted September 22, 2011 chapter 2 sora woke up in traverse town restaurant 2nd flour "where am i? huh, my clothes changed.where is riku and the others?"said sora "riku, where are you?"sora shouted "man, your so noisy."said a floating guy(which he is neku) "huh?aaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh"screamed sora because he fell off the balconey thump "you alright there sora?"said neku "thanks. how do u know my name?"said sora "huh?your not a player in this game then?"said neku "a player"said sora "like usual, this is a game.players have this timer on their hands. i cant afford to lose this game."said neku there is some numbers on neku hands "i dont get this game but can i help u"said sora "only if u dont get in the way"said neku "by the way, what is your name?"said sora suddently, monsters came out of nowhere "Dream Eaters!"said neku "what a weird name"said sora "not me, them. they are our targets"said neku "Ok... (darn, they look so cute. i should get one for kairi)"said sora and they engaged into combat elsewhere... riku woke up by the sound of water "where am i?"said riku "u are in twilight town"said a mysterious voice that riku reconise 1 4Everbee reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted September 22, 2011 OH SOOO COOL! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted September 23, 2011 chapter 3 riku look at the person who just answered his question it was at first Diz, but then he changed to Malificent "embrace the darkness now"said maleficent then, riku felt a headache then maleficent turn to a guy riku didn't reconise "embrace the darkness. TERRA"said the mystery man(spoilers:xehanort) "terra?"said riku then riku blacked out ............................. riku woke up at a bell tower "your awake, huh"said a hunchback man "hi"said riku "rare to see a guy lying on the streets huh. i took pity on you and brought you here"said the hunchback man riku was about to ask lots of questions like where he is or where are his friends but he needs to be polite "my name is riku. what's yours?"said riku "my name is quasimotor(sorry if i spelled the name wrong)."said the hunchback man "where am i?"asked riku "don't you know, we are in (i am making a false name since i dont know the place) Kelstin town"said quasimotor sora point of view "can i have your name"asked sora "Neku, Neku Sakuraba"said Neku "Neku Sakuraba, what an interesting name" said sora "It's nothing interesting"said Neku just then, a pig/dog and panda looking dream eater appeared "Dream Eaters again."said sora "these are not your targets, they are your partners"said neku "how do you know" said sora "their symbols are slightly different then the ones we fought"said neku "oh yeah..."said sora finished chapter 3. took me a long time hope you enjoy it 1 4Everbee reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XxKHFanForLifeXx 12 Posted September 23, 2011 awesome Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
spenskh89 66 Posted September 23, 2011 I'm so confused. 1 Kinode reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DTD 33 Posted September 23, 2011 this is good Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sora's Baby 729 Posted September 23, 2011 lol 3D ripoff lol. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
kairisbaby1794 1 Posted September 27, 2011 I just saw the trailers for this game and this looks like it could happen. Good job. :0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted September 30, 2011 chapter 4 riku P.O.V. quasimotor stared at the parade below "quasimotor."said riku quasimotor just stared blankly "quasimotor"said riku no responds "QUASIMOTOR"riku shouted quasimotor leap of surprise "sorry about that riku.it just that i have to work here forever or else i get punished"said quasimotor riku felt sorry for the man then, dream eaters appeared on the parade and attaking people "quasimotor, stay here"said riku riku went down the bell tower and fought the dream eaters after he defeated them, the town flocks thank him for saying the parade then, quasimotor was crying sorry for long wait and short chapter, i didn't have an idea for the story 2 DChiuch and 4Everbee reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sapphrix (twilight denizen) XV 30 Posted September 30, 2011 Yknow, i'm actually liking this. keep working on the form of it and things should turn out just fine Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mikuo 92 Posted September 30, 2011 i guess is ok Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sora's Baby 729 Posted September 30, 2011 yea i like it. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Captain Scrotum 53 Posted September 30, 2011 I'm sorry, but I laughed so much at "QUASIMOTOR". 3 Koko, SoraKH and Kinode reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Koko 3,944 Posted September 30, 2011 If you're going to write, please try to have accurate spelling and grammar. Also fluff things up. Each' chapter' is like barely a paragraph. 1 Kinode reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
4Everbee 1,365 Posted September 30, 2011 I LOVED IT! i find it awesome and non normal(thats a good thing-KEEP IT Up! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted September 30, 2011 I'm sorry, but I laughed so much at "QUASIMOTOR". i will hunt u down Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Snow 1,800 Posted October 2, 2011 CHAPTER ONE "Sora, are you sure you want to take your mark of master test?"asked mickey "Of course. I've been fighting for too long not to." said sora "Lets head over to Mystic Tower, then" said Mickey When they arrived, they talked to Yen Sid. "Sora, Riku, you have done excellent jobs at repelling the darkness." said yen sid "Heheh, it was nothin'." said Sora, putting his hands behind his head and interlacing his fingers. "Xehanort's on the move again. This time, the real one." said Yen Sid "Umm, who's Xehanort?" said Sora "Xehanort is a person who has done unforgivable wrongings in the past." "Why is he back?" Riku said "His Heartless and Nobody have come together." said yen sid "Looks like we've got more work to do."said Sora "It'll be a while before they completely merge. You will have to take the Mark of Mastery test first."said Yen Sid "I got this in the bag."said Sora, grinning from ear to ear. Riku looked at his shoes. "But....I....succumbed to darkness. I shouldn't take the test." "Do not worry. It was not you who succumbed, or, at least, made you succumb. It was Xehanort."said Yen Sid "You two will now fall into a deep sleep, where you will dream of many things. Awaken, and I will name you Masters." Yen Sid said. Sora smiled at the thought of his name, Master Sora. Then, Riku and Sora fell back, and went through the ground. CHAPTER ONE FINISH Like my translation? I can keep going. 1 Kinode reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sora's Baby 729 Posted October 2, 2011 Way Better. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Snow 1,800 Posted October 2, 2011 Thanks Damn, the ultimate 2 your making this thread go long. I'll translate the rest tomorrow. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted October 3, 2011 Thanks Damn, the ultimate 2 your making this thread go long. I'll translate the rest tomorrow. sorry and ask my permission first Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
