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Text Lu Xun's stories : A Frightful Prevision

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  1. 1. Are you enjoying this story so far?

    • Yes, I love it!
    • Yes, it's ok.
    • Hm... more or less...
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  2. 2. We're near the end, so between 5 and 10, which number would you choose to give to the story?

  3. 3. Do you like this style of story? (I mean, two characters writing a diary)

    • Yeah, it's cool to watch them "fighting" forth and back.
    • Yes, I like.
    • It's ok.
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    • No, I'd like if it were like most of stories are.
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    • Doesn't matter. I love everything you write <3


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Great but I have a little trouble reading the light light text so think you can make darker when you add another one?

 

Sure. I've changed the blue one to a darker one.

 

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And to you all, thanks for the comments. What an author likes the most is to have their stories read and to know that people like it. So, thank yooou <3

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Interesting....

Really good my friend! The March 30th part is my favorite mainly cause some of that stuff can happen if we really f*ck up.

Anyway keep writing, I find your stories very interesting. :D

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In the next pages, you will be able to read and put your imagination to work -- or at least give it a try -- in order to understand everything that this story will tell, or at least try.

 

This sentence is a bit awkward and you may want to consider rephrasing it. Otherwise, great start. I'm curious as to what the provision is and what they're doing.

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Thank you who replied after my response. I hope you enjoy this new part <3

 

>April 20th <-

 

You won’t believe me. We have failed during our attempt of killing their leader. Thanks to the people, he was able to flee to another country. They’ve made that country the base for their operations. I don’t know how the country was called, but now its name is “Sacred and Pure Land”. This represents a big loss to us, the ones who SHOULD have taken care of ending the prevision by eliminating those who proclaim it.

 

But past is past, we need to look for the future. And, to make it all worse, by each day that we’re not capable of defeating them, their so-called prevision is getting nearer... And that’s what makes me frightened. But, enough about it. I’ll be telling the main details of the battle in the next paragraphs.

 

The battle began on April 13th, at 11:00a.m. Their leader, whose name is Drak, appeared alone on England. So, we quickly joined our forces and went to there as soon as possible. However, when we arrived there, the city where Drak was passing through was in a chaotic situation. The people -- who had been warned by Drak that we were arriving -- began to make a rebellion. They closed the streets, and therefore we could not pass, at least not with our cars. Then, the few of us who had helicopters, continued as fast as possible, while the others who were forced to leave their cars, kept running after Drak.

 

Unfortunately, however, the people refused to leave, and began to make a big manifestation. We -- at least for that moment -- were so happy, because it was the first actual chance we’ve had to catch and end this thing that most of my friend call “Madness of the Devil”. But the destiny was really against us. So, some of our officers began to shoot at the people -- it was the only way to make them move. Around 300 people were killed, and 999 were badly injured. In the end, what made us stoop shooting was that, one soldier -- who didn’t have any ability with a gun -- accidentally shot at a baby’s face, which caused the grief of everyone.

 

In less than ten minutes, some medics arrived, and managed to treat the baby very well. “Ah, we’re saved. I couldn’t keep blaming my friends and me for the death of a pure and innocent little baby,” I thought to myself at that very moment. So, since everything returned to normal, we began to shoot again. This time, however, it was Drak himself who stopped us. He said some strange words -- which were surely not from our language -- and so a tornado appeared. To make it stranger, it only hit soldiers of our troops, no one from his followers was hit by it. I’m not sure if that was an illusion created by him, or if he really does have powers, but it’s hard to believe.

 

Well, I don’t have much time, so I’ll go right to the end. We had to retreat, while the people who follow him began to smile for their little victory. Drak managed to successfully arrive in his new country, and with him in there, it’ll be very hard to kill him now... I’ve heard that the country is completely surrounded by soldiers who also proclaim the prevision. Drak himself is living in a big palace. I still can’t believe we’ve missed this chance.. Well, enough of regrets... I need to leave now. I hope this has kept you guys entertained for some minutes, or if you read quickly, for some moments. Oh my god, I need to sleep... Tomorrow we will begin to think our new scheme to destroy that country, and kill Drak.

 

-----------------------------------------------------------------------> I'll add another day report shortly.<---------------------------------------

 

 

How was it? Did you like? I'll write more about this story with time. Just share your thoughts below, please :)

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