SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 1 Day 1 It's been one day since i saw Sora for the last time....i'm so sad i won't ever see him again but i have to work... I have to work hard if i want Sora to get back his memories..his true memories. The progress is still 0%,i have to begin and quick. But i don't know where to start from. There are a lot of pieces missing and i'm confused....i will have to begin from deleting all his memories from castle oblivion...hmm this will take me time....5 days perhaps... then i will focus on destiny islands... i have to restore to his memory Kairi and the islands.... and i have to restore them quick... Kairi is waiting for him and she still has hope she hasn't forgotten about him... but this wont last for long...i have to hurry! 5 4Everbee, RoxasXSora, Darkfire1408 and 2 others reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 2 Day 3 Finally today i'm almost done with deleting the co memories!!! By the way something strange happend today...when i was looking at Sora's original memories the machine of memories showed a strange signal...i pressed the esc button but the signal still remained there. Then a document popped out and wanted me to accept if i wanted to see it. So i saved the original memories that i had of sora and i placed them in a safe document, i locked the document with a password and then i accepted the text..it showed some memories found deep inside sora's heart...they were very blury so i tried cleaning them with the refresh button, but they still stayed the same... i pressed the recon buttton and i figured out that the memories were 11 years old... back then when sora was 4... when i got the best picture that i could the memories were persons with the names aq-- and t-r--...the names weren't clear. It was very strange,but i decided to deal with them after i finish the deleting... 3 Darkfire1408, RoxasXSora and Hunter Hawk reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XxKHFanForLifeXx 12 Posted August 24, 2011 very nice but sora was 4 not 5 lol please do more Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 i will do more 1 RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 3 Day 10 Finally the deleting is done! The progress had some delays and the machine of memories had a problem but i fixed it with fira...all i had to do was to fire up the pipes so the memories could go faster and i wouldn't have any problems with transfering from the machine to Sora..While i was searching the file of the memories for destiny island i rememberd the strange memories of the figures named aq-- and t-r- that appeard on the machine. So i placed the destiny island memories in the transfering place,i controlled the settings from heart to memories and i pressed transfer. The strange thing was that there was an option "heart"....i wonder what it meant. When the transfer started the machine said it will take 2-3 days to finish the process. When the transfer started for good i went to the computer and found the strange memories. Then i transfered it to the main machine (the strongest transfer machine acording to ansem the wise) and i tried to put action to the memories. A video showed up. The first one was for the t-r-- person and it was showing destiny islands but the memory was so blured and dark and i couldnt recognize the people. I was sure i saw Riku there and he was talking to someone...the figure that Riku was talking to was a shadow in Soras memory....He was very blury... then Riku came back to Sora and he mentioned a name...Tra. Now the name was better: t-r-a! There were still letters missing but it was way better than before!...Then i placed the memory in the storage of memories and i looked up at the other one. I did the same thing with the previous memory and it showed a video of Sora and Riku talking to a shadow again.... But this time i new it was a girl...she was wearing a dress and she had girl's hairstyle ...she said her name is Aqu- there was one more letter! Then she said something about Riku and falling into darkness... When i finished studiyng the memory i placed it in the storage and i took my sketch book. I sat on my chair and i started drawing...... 3 Hunter Hawk, Darkfire1408 and RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Silvia Kuroi 1,480 Posted August 24, 2011 Nice. Good story, and shows what Namine was feeling during several events. The only problems i've seen so far is a few spelling errors. Beyond that, the story is great. 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 4 Day 21 I'm now done with transfering the memories of Kairi and the islands and now i'm transfering the memories of travers town....i'm so dissapointed with myself..... Today while i was searching the memories, a big part of them with Sora and Kairi escaped. I tried to catch them but i couldnt run more.... i had to stay with Sora. The only thing i know is that they found a way out and they went to twilight town! I ran back to the place were Sora was and i turned on the memory founder, but no sign of the memories.... i was so afraid that maybe they found another body to stay in...and i wasn't wrong....Later this afternoon Ansem met me at the old mansion and he told me the bad news...Riku who was with him found out that the memories went somewhere but they weren't sure if it was a body. Riku run down the stairs that were leading to Sora. I ran behind him but Ansem stopped me. He told me to give him a little time with his friend...when Riku was done he said that he was going to go and find the memories. Then he ran out from the mansion and opened a DTD. In the evening i placed some more memories and went to sleep... i couldn't sleep with the thought that maybe i had destroyed Sora!.. 3 Darkfire1408, Hunter Hawk and RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 thanks all of you for the good comments i will continue the story! 1 RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 5 Day 25 Finally we heard news from Riku. He said there is this girl that is somehow connected to Sora and he also said that he is going to find out why...after that he said something to Ansem and he left. Then Ansem told me that i had to continue with my work and he will inform me if he had new. With these words he went in the dining room and he closed the door. Back to the basemant i finally restored the memories i was working on and i found a way to put behind all these memories the ones with tra and aqu...the memory meter was 10%....Suddenly heartless started coming from nowhere!!!! I was so scared and this was so weird!! The heartless started attacking Sora.... i cried for help and Ansem came. He took a machine and he killed all the heartless.....he said that there are a few heartless in the mansion and we had to lock the basemant in order for Sora to stay safe. Then he orded me to lock the doors and stay in until the mansion was fully safe...i pressed the lockdown button.....Ansem ran and said keep the good work. Then he went through the metal door and the door closed with a big bang! I knew that i had to stay in here for a long time! 5 RoxasXSora, coolwings, Hunter Hawk and 2 others reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 6 Day 75 It's been 1 month since we are in lockdown! I think i'm gonna go crazy! The good news is that the memory meter is 30% full and i'm getting news from Ansem with the help of the news machine. Today he said that the girl that's connected to Sora is from organazation 13 and she can wield a keyblade....A what? i answerd back... I asked him how it is possible that she can wield a keyblade and he answered that Riku is going to find out... that moment i lost signal. I was so bored so i started drawing. Then i examined the machines, i practiced a few spells and then i remembered the heart option - that i figured out the first days the memory machine had. I went and opened the manual and i started reading memory machine memory transfer.....no.....no no aha here it is. I turned to page 245 and i started reading "heart transfer..with this option you can transfer hearts to heartless.."that night i had a lot in my mind...why would the machine transfer hearts?? 4 Darkfire1408, coolwings, RoxasXSora and 1 other reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
narutopins 11 Posted August 24, 2011 good namines diary did this really happen Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 7 Day 77 The lockdown is finally over and we are free! The doors opened. Ansem came to the basemant. He walked in and said call me Diz..and i was like okay! I asked him about news and he said that Riku can tell me all the details. Riku walked in and i asked him about the memories. Diz walked away and Riku said that the organization has two keyblade wielders. One is the nobody of Sora... i stopped him. I wanted to see Sora's nobody and i asked him if he would let me. He answerd that is dangerous and that i have to stay here and finish my work. He said that the organazation is looking for us and that Sora has to wake up soon and take them down... Today i visited Destiny Islands.. It seems everyone is happy but this is not going to last long. If Kairi's and Sora's memories stay seperate for a long time there is a chance that the two of them will forget each other for ever...we have to find the other memories and find them fast!!! 2 Darkfire1408 and RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Think Pink 1,967 Posted August 24, 2011 This is pretty good! You need to capitalize more often, though. When you say "I" or someone's name, it needs to be capitalized. Also, when someone is speaking a number, you need to write the word form of the number. Since this is all in Namine's perspective, except for when you use percentages, the numbers should always be written out. Next chapter, also try to check for spelling errors. It's very easy, especially if you're typing fast, to make a typo. If you run your story through spell-checker before you post, it will usually clear up most of your spelling and grammar mistakes. Again, it's a great story! I really like it so far. 2 SoraKH and coolwings reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted August 24, 2011 Cool story. Keep it up! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Hey butterflylexie it's true i write type in very quick and sometimes my sentences are meaningless and stupid and yes i have a lot of spelling errors and i will try to fix it thanks for the comment!! 1 RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
The Transcendent Key 12,109 Posted August 24, 2011 Dude, you have serious storytelling skills, i salute you man. Hey, do us a favor and write more chapters!!! Hey I also wrote a story called the keyblade war. By the way for all those who read my story, I wrote chapter thirteen a few weeks back, and im waiting for some comments so i can write chapter fourteen. Comment on my story! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
xBerserkerSaix07x 125 Posted August 24, 2011 Nice!!! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHlover12 22 Posted August 24, 2011 Wow this is amazing! It really captures Namine's character! keep it up! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SoraKH 793 Posted August 24, 2011 Chapter 8 Day 80 Today Diz gave me a quest for twilight town. He said that he will stay with Sora. The quest was to go and investigate the town...so I went. I started from the clock tower and I continued in the underground caves. Heartless were all around but Diz gave me a machine that I could kill the heartless so i didnt have any problems. Later I continued to the station...the town was quiet, the people were just shopping and talking. Nothing strange was going on. When i went back to the clock tower I saw some men in black. There were two of them. The one was a stranger and the other one was very familiar. He looked very much like Sora.... he looked a lot like him...without losing time i followed them until we reached the top of the tower. There they sat and they ate ice cream watching the sunset.... Roxas? Said the red haired one.... It was him the nobody of Sora.... he was finally here!!!! I had finallly seen him!! 2 Hunter Hawk and RoxasXSora reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Darkfire1408 43 Posted August 24, 2011 Nice! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Hunter Hawk 392 Posted August 25, 2011 Jeez, this story is awsome!!! You should become a writer! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
xBerserkerSaix07x 125 Posted August 26, 2011 Yeeaugh! 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Naroco 26 Posted August 26, 2011 I need my fix of Namine Diary please keep going 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
LeahTheLion 1 Posted August 27, 2011 I love this. TRULY EPIC. 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
coolwings 1,546 Posted January 14, 2012 No more...... I want more its awesome..... 1 SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
