Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted May 6, 2011 Prolough: At a cold freezing night, a baby who was abandon whom we dont know hisname is at the side of the street when a guy dressed in black said your name will be xehanort. This is my first time writing so please enjoy it 3 VaxidXIV, Destati_Dream_XIII and SoraKH reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Evil-Ven-the darkness king 5 Posted May 6, 2011 wow, this is very intresting. so far, if its a fanfic story, i'd be happy to keep on reading as this story progesses more around the great master xehanort. but the tpoic is very cool, i will do anything to help out master xehanort and your story, if you want to read my stories, i'd be happy to send you a link Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Maffy 45 Posted May 6, 2011 Let's see let's see ! You've picked one of my least fav chars if not the actual last one ! It seems interesting since well backstories always give a dif feel to the char (Days made me adore Roxas) and although it gives off a vibe of Organization 13 with the dude in black coat , it can still be interesting If you make the story well made and have a strong connection between the parts in it , it can be great ! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHlover12 22 Posted May 6, 2011 Sounds interesting please write more. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Naroco 26 Posted May 6, 2011 its ok i need more to give it a rating Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted May 6, 2011 Naroco, why didn't you give a rating to my chapters 8D? The story seems fine so far. Hope to see the 1st chapter soon! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted May 7, 2011 you guys can give ideas for me Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted May 7, 2011 Chapter 1 Dear Diary It's been many years since xehanort came to this school, at first, ithought he was a show off but then he beat the bullies one time so he is my best friend. Today we are learning how to use the final level of fire, firaga so i hope i pass. From Yen Sid "Hey Yen" said Xehanort."it's class time and stop sticking with your diary. "comming." said Yen Sid That's the end of chapter 1 and i will probably post a chapter every week so stay tune Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHlover12 22 Posted May 7, 2011 It's good but I wish you would make the chapters longer. Regardless I'm interested in where this is going to go so update soon Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted May 8, 2011 chapter 2 "Today, we will learn about the keyblade war instead of firaga because within a few years time, you must face it. Turn your history textbook to page 189."said the master "history lesson is the worse"said xehanort "now read the reason of the keyblade war Yen Sid" the master said "hmm, they saying about some x-blade and kingdom hearts."Yen Sid said "correct" the master said That night, xehanort is having a nightmare of a guy shouting OPEN Kingdom Hearts AND UNLEASH THE X-BLADE i made it a little longer so hope you enjoy it 1 Destati_Dream_XIII reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Razorwind Keyblade 304 Posted May 8, 2011 This is nice. Who ever knew that Xehanort was once a kid (lol isn't he over 9000!). Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted May 8, 2011 everybody have to go through child age first razorwind keyblade PS i probably write about xehanorts girlfriend Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted May 8, 2011 The story is getting cool. Hope to see the next chapter soon! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
black x feather 0 Posted May 12, 2011 Nice. I like the whole idea of Xehanort being at his young years and all, but I feel something missing from the 1st chapter. That or you did that on purpose. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted May 28, 2011 chapter 3 xehanort is eating an appolonia(apple in a another world) at his favourate tree when a girl about his age with blue hair fell on him "what the hell was that for Luna"said xehanort "oh come on, it was an accident" said Luna the 2 children was talking about things and homework when xehanort saw a girl with orange hair from Luna "xehanort?"said Luna "nothing" said xehanort that night the same nightmare came again "the x-blade. kingdom hearts" xehanort scream when darkness came looming on him for a few seconds sorry for the long wait, couldn't think of anything for the past 2 weeks 1 Destati_Dream_XIII reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
yayitsdre 4 Posted May 28, 2011 That's really interesting so far. Nice. (: Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rikunobodyxiii 700 Posted May 28, 2011 So far, so good. I'm interested to see how you continue the story. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted June 12, 2011 chapter 4 "i felt darkness looming the school, is anyone learning forbiden or dark spells in your room" said the master "no"everyone said xehanort went to his favourate tree when luna poped out of nowhere again "hello"said luna "hello"said xehanort "would you like to hear a story"said luna "sure" said xehanort "Long ago, the world was united and filled with warm light. People loved the light and eventually began to fight over it. Then began the war. Then darkness to find its way into people hearts .darkness consumed the hearts and the light of people. In a flash it spread.The world disappeared into the darkness. A slimmer of light remains in the hearts of children .children gathered there the light recreated the world. However the world was no longer united. They were split into many thousands of small worlds. The true light is hidden deep in the hearts of children."luna said "how sad"xehanort said that night, xehanort heard the same voice but this time, he slept walked "kiiiiiiiiiillllllllllllll" the voice said xehanort woke up in his bedroom the next morning and saw himself covered in blood. longer chapter right everyone 1 Destati_Dream_XIII reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Destati_Dream_XIII 91 Posted June 12, 2011 I'm liking your story so far. I'm looking forward to it as you add more chapters. Great job! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
luckey charm 0 Posted June 12, 2011 This is an awesome story. Kepp it up! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted June 19, 2011 chapter 5 "your master was badly injurt and in a coma"said the replacement master 1 "who could done that"whimpered the students "no 1 is to leave after all of the lessons, the attacker might be lurking around"said the replacement master 1 evening BONG!!BONG! the bell rang "everybody, go back to your room and dont come out till we said so"said the replacement master 1 Luna and yen sid crept into xehanorts room "i am scared" said both of them "dont be scared, we can beat the guy or girl or monster ourselves" said xehanort "i dont know"said yen sid that night, the voice gotten more intence and sharper but familiar "xehanort, KKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL NNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWW" xehanort sleptwalk and yen sid thought he saw xehanort woken up 'xe..ha..nort?"asked yen sid but no answer because xehanort used the sleep spell now the real problem starts 1 Kirie reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Ultimate Oblivion 52 Posted July 5, 2011 chapter 6 (area) inside xehanorts head i won't give in to he darkness.Said xehanort u must. u cannot imbrace it any longer. said the darkness xehanort.said some voice that has some warm fuzzy feeling who's is there.said xehanort the voice continued dont think of me, it's not me.said the darkness a bright light flashed xehanort woke up everybody was around him what happened.asked xehanort you were in a coma for three weeks said yen sid THREE WEEKS. said xehanort that is strange, it felt like it was shorter thought xehanort good thing your awake, luna been with u for three weeks said yen sid thank god cried luna sorry for delay, lots of homework new season next 1 Kirie reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Destati_Dream_XIII 91 Posted July 5, 2011 Great job!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rikuluver15 35 Posted July 8, 2011 (gosh it's so weird thinking of yen sid and xehanort young...) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
