Macroxen 32 Posted November 22, 2010 Day 29 The hospital was just plain white, and smelled of rotting flesh and vomit. The orderlies dragged me, but I managed to get away. I tried to get away but I ran, tripped, stumbled, and fell, till the orderlies started dragging me again. They took an empty seringe and shanked my arm with it. It drank the living red fluid like it was parched. I waited for the oppertune time to strike. The second he pulled the seringe out of my limb I grabbed his face and jabbed my fingers into his eyes. He screamed and the one in the black coat came after me. I grabbed the blood filled seringe and stabbed it into his tear duct and squirted the blood into is brain, he dropped like a rock. The other man in the white shirt came twards me and I grabbed a scalple and that object went into his chest, his mouth filled with blood and he died in a red puddle. I had to hide the bodies so I put them in the medical closet. I got to the nearest bathroom and stuck my finger into my mouth and expelled all my stomach contents into the sink. I sifted the vomit in my hands and found what I was looking for...... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
LionheartXIII 6 Posted November 22, 2010 Very Interesting! I Want to know more!!! Plz!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SummerRain 185 Posted November 22, 2010 nice start Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Antrium 10 Posted November 22, 2010 ........................ O_O............. I did not expect that much blood.....................That was so freakin amazing... MORE!!!!!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
heartless101 83 Posted November 22, 2010 Damn! Very interesting! Please write more! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
VENROXAS 152 Posted November 22, 2010 Oh wow that was verry well described, Good job man Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted November 22, 2010 Day 1 "Dude, just try it!" "No man, I'm already hyped up on Vicaden, and Xanex, why do I need to do this?" "PUSSY!" "It is nice. Alright, I'll do it but, just because you wont stop bugging me about it." So I took the hand rolled blunt and lit that shit up. I inhaled and held it in till I almost coughed. "WHOA! Dude, that was a big ass hit man! Look, your eyes are all blood shot and your almost crying dude! SHIT!" "PFFFF! Man, I haven't felt like this since I firetrucked that chick wit' dem' CC tities. AHHHH! God, that was nice." "AHHHHHH! DON'T HURT ME PLEASE! PLEASE, PLEASE! AHHHHHH!" That was the sound of my mother being murderd by the military police force here in my home town, Gidarm. The kitchen was a mess, blood every were. The one visable foot print was in my moms head. Size 12, standerd military boot. What happend is the military came in, asked were I was, they said they didn't know. So the police got pissed, shot my dad in the shoulder and one in the eye. My mom was not so fortunate, she got brtaly beaten till they stomped her face in. The only thing that kept me from going suicide is my little sister, she was 14, 6 years younger than me. She just sat in her room crying, just crying. "Hey, look, what we're gonna do, is pack as much crap as we can. Such as clothes, monny, valubles, every thing that is worth some thing. Meet me in the garage in an hour." "Ok Bro." I went into the kitchen, still gory, took the biggest cooler and stuffed that thing with as much food stuffs as I could. Went to my 1986 Toyota Corola hatch-back, and put it in the trunk. In about 3 minutes, Haven Alice was there with 3 suit cases and 4 backpacks full of things that we would need. "Lets go girl." "OK." We left around, 9:00 pm and got on the highway at around, 11:45 pm. "You know were we need to go Alice?" "Some where to eat besides this crap in your car? AH HAHAHA!" "Oh very funny Alice, but lets go to Smokers Corner!" "Yeah! Since you pretty much own the place, we get to eat practicly free!" I floored it and took a right turn and KABAM!!!! A 18 wheeler is right there in the wrong lane. "AAHHHHH! ALICE! ALICE ARE YOU OK!?" I look to find her but she wasn't in her seat. I look at the front of the truck and her head was in the grill. I went to go pull her out bet her head was to far mutilated by the huge fan of the deisle engine. "AALLLIICCEEE!!!" I walked to the driver side of the big truck to go beat the crap out of the driver, but he was knocked unconcince, so I slammed his head into the stearing wheel. "firetruck YOU FATE! firetruck YOU TO HELL!" I went to Alices corpse and took her necklace. It said, Alice a true believer. Took the necklace and put it around my own neck, and started to walk to Smokers Corner in Cracanum. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
heartless101 83 Posted November 22, 2010 Nice job. I want to find out what happens next Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted November 22, 2010 well, thats for tomorow. i got other things to do like try to finish my Biology class Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tails 6,692 Posted November 22, 2010 Wow, nice story you wrote there. You should definitely write more of these^^. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted November 22, 2010 i will tomorow, day 2 and 3 are tomorow Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted November 24, 2010 Day 2 I got to Cracanum, and to Smokers Corner. And saw my best friend, Jakk. "HEY! BROIAN! I havent seen you in forever. Have a "Jakk and Coke" on me eh?" "hey jakk, sure, you know that i dont pass up free drinks." A Jakk and Coke is exactly what it is. Jakk takes his hime made boose and takes some Coke, and mixes it. So i chugged 4 of those down. Since at the time, my little sis got mutalated, and my parents got mudered, I was gonna get shitfaced. "JAKK! GET ME A NOTER ONE! NOW!!!" "OK, OK. Here, your 10th one tonight." As I was chugging this glass, some gay gentleman, I mean GAY! As in the lithpah and that walk was just to feminen. And he's all strutin' his shit like he owns the place. He was actualy hitting on a guy. "Hey hunkey monkey, wanna let me peel your banana?" "er, no." And since I knew that this gay guy was gonna do a number on me, I decided to put this to an end quick. "HEY! You firetrucking gentleman GET OUTTA HERE!" "tsch, now do you think that wath nithe? OOOO! Your quite the man I'm lookin' for." O_O' "er...... no, my ass hole expales things, not takes them in..... so why dont you just leave now and you wont get hurt." "tsch, like you would hurt me, Imma flower." ^^' "firetruck this." I ran up to the guy and went to go put my hand through his face but he ducked. So I just picked up my knee into his face, he started to cry. "Why would you DO THIS TO ME!!!!" "Cause you're gay." "WOOHOOO! YEAH! YOU GO BRO!" That was the whole entire bar cheering. ^^ made me feel good. "And now I'm gonna go puke in the terlet." And so I wake up the next morning next to the toilet with a bottle of Jakk in my hand. "Guess I couldn't stop drinking. Hmph." But I hear some gun shots in the lobby, so I decided to go check it out. I walk in to find that gay guy and his "partner"s friends. "Oh gawd, what the hell do you want now!? A free cake?" "Tsch, NO! We want an appology for what you did to my pretty face." "For one, you're uglier than my dead dog, and two, I ain't gonna apologize for what I did. You were harassing my customers, and you were annoying me teribly." "Well if you're not gonna apologize, I'll just make you." "ok." I went to go grab my sword but it was gone. Were was my sword, in my room in the back. So I run back there and grabbed it. It was a Soilder sword from the compony, Soilder. But I customized it. It's 5'6" long. And has a bunch of nicks in it. So I grab my sword and charge into battle, which was a very short one. The main gay guy, Josh, came at me and I just stuck the tip of my sword and that went through his sternum and broke his spine. The next guy got a broken glass bottle to the face, Jakk through that. The last guy tried to run away but I through a stool at him and broke his back also. "Ok, I'm sorry, I'm sorry that you're gay and can't get some pussy." I left the Smokers Corner and went to the main square. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sorage55 10 Posted November 24, 2010 An interesting story mate. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Antrium 10 Posted November 26, 2010 *nervous twitch* Good keep going. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted November 26, 2010 Day 3 I got to the main square and there was an old guy stairing at me. So I took a rock and cliped him right in the temple, squirted blood all over the place. But I got to my destination, Gaibirals Garage. "Hey Gabe, what up cuz?" "HEY! Broian, I haven't seen you in ages, how is your sword doin'?" "It's good, just some nicks, but i like it like that. It's seraited." "Nice, I'm guessin' you need a ride?" "Yes, a fast one at that." So Gabe brings me to the back to see a row of cars. The one I was eyeing was a 1999 Nissan Skyline R34 GTR. Very nice and very rare. "I want that one." "Uhhh. Sure, I know you won't wreck it, won't you?" " Why don't you come with me?" O_O "Ok, sure. But why do I need to?" "Because the military is after me." not finished Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Antrium 10 Posted November 26, 2010 I feel adventure on the way Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted November 29, 2010 Day 3 I got to the main square and there was an old guy stairing at me. So I took a rock and cliped him right in the temple, squirted blood all over the place. But I got to my destination, Gaibirals Garage. "Hey Gabe, what up cuz?" "HEY! Broian, I haven't seen you in ages, how is your sword doin'?" "It's good, just some nicks, but i like it like that. It's seraited." "Nice, I'm guessin' you need a ride?" "Yes, a fast one at that." So Gabe brings me to the back to see a row of cars. The one I was eyeing was a 1999 Nissan Skyline R34 GTR. Very nice and very rare. "I want that one." "Uhhh. Sure, I know you won't wreck it, won't you?" " Why don't you come with me?" O_O "Ok, sure. But why do I need to?" "Because the military is after me." "Ok, sure. You know that I'm up for some debautchery." Even though I had no idea of what he said, we went on the road about 2:05 am. And we got on the highway, again, around 2:15 am, traffic was a bitch. We start down highway 48, on our way to the Comastey desert. This is the most uninhabitable place in all of Okama's vally. The creature's here are vile and scum. Well most of them are any ways. But, of course, our car breaks down. In the middle of the desert. And that is the most danger is. So I call for a towtruck and it gets here in like, 10 minutes. But in those 10 minute was hell on earth. not finished Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Antrium 10 Posted November 29, 2010 I like this keep it coming! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Giginha 22 Posted November 29, 2010 I love this, just try to do a bit of description, that I've already talked to you about. ^^ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted December 1, 2010 Day 3 I got to the main square and there was an old guy stairing at me. So I took a rock and cliped him right in the temple, squirted blood all over the place, made a nice splatter on the statue. But I got to my destination, Gaibirals Garage. "Hey Gabe, what up cuz?" "HEY! Broian, I haven't seen you in ages, how is your sword doin'?" "It's good, just some nicks, but i like it like that. It's seraited." "Nice, I'm guessin' you need a ride?" "Yes, a fast one at that." So Gabe brings me to the back to see a row of cars. The one I was eyeing was a 1999 Nissan Skyline R34 GTR. Very nice and very rare. "I want that one." "Uhhh. Sure, I know you won't wreck it, won't you?" " Why don't you come with me?" O_O "Ok, sure. But why do I need to?" "Because the military is after me." "Ok, sure. You know that I'm up for some debautchery." Even though I had no idea of what he said, we went on the road about 2:05 am. And we got on the highway, again, around 2:15 am, traffic was a bitch. We start down highway 48, on our way to the Comastey desert. This is the most uninhabitable place in all of Okama's vally. The creature's here are vile and scum. Well most of them are any ways. But, of course, our car breaks down. In the middle of the desert. And that is the most danger is. So I call for a towtruck and it gets here in like, 10 minutes. But in those 10 minute was hell on earth. There are these monsters, that will follow you around till you stop to look at something, and then they ambush you. we call these, Nite Bushes, because they ambush you, and, they're ver hairy. Then there are the Bone Hunters. These are the most inteligent of the monsters. They have villages that are fun to raid, and they have towns and even cities in some parts of the desert. These guys will no stop, you kill one, 15 more come out. And that's what happend, I saw the first one, shot him in the head with my .44 caliber Desert Eagle/ M16 assault rifle. Then 15, I think, came out at once. This was the fun part, I sliced the first one ,with my own version of Cloud Strifes Fusion Swords, strait down the middle of its body. Then Gabe just goes Kung-fu on some of them, I was shocked. Two more came from behind and shot one with my gunblade and cut the other one in half at the waist, left some nice juicey entrails too. Next, they all decided to come at once. This was also fun, I decided to use the one sure thing to get rid of these annoying basturds. "ULTIMAGUN!" Kaboooom! And they were nothing but piles of ashes. "Well that went better than expected. I forgot you knew that Bro." "Yeah, somethin' I pull out of my ass some times." The tow truck got here and with some old fat greasy sweaty guy. Nastey basturd, and i had to sit next to him. He smelt of cigarets and boose, and of sweat. He had bad pimples on his face to. Gabe just looooked at me like 'what the hell his this guy doing?' "So how did you two guys get out here?" "We were heading to the top of Okama's vally, to do some hunting for Beachlurks." ^^ I was proud of that. "Oh yeah? You look like the kid thats wanted for $80,000,000,00$ no?" "Actualy, it's $8,000,000,000$ and yes, it's me, now either TRY and confine me, or just keep driving." "LOOKS LIKE IT'S MY LUCKY DAY!" He pulls out a .44 magnum revolver and points it at my head. O_O Scared the shit out of me. Gabe didn't like this, not one bit. "Nuh uh, NO! THIS IS NOT YOUR LUCKY BITCH! IT'S MINE!" Gabe reaches over me and grabs the drivers hand and slams it into the steering wheel, and he drops the gun into my shaking lap. The driver screamed and Gabe picked up the .44 and pulled the trigger. The guys head went every were. Mostly out the window but some stayed in the truck. Blood, oh my gawd was there blood. On the windshield, on me and Gabe. I was trembling, I puked on the corpes. We dumped the body in a near-by Dead Hound hole. If I haven't said by now, Dead Hounds are exactly what their name is, dead hounds. They are savages, and will eat everything on the corpes, thus the reason why we put it there. Gabe and I cleaned the inside of the cab as much as we could, mostly to get the smell out, and we drove to my heaven, The Strip of Okama. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
LionheartXIII 6 Posted December 1, 2010 I like your chose of words!! Keep it up!!!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted December 6, 2010 Day 4 So Gabe and I go to the Strip of Okama just fine, besides me getting bit by a giant rat and having to puke for 3 hours, we got there just in time for the "Free for All". The "Free for All" is when all the whore houses and gambling houses have there girls go out and have some compony "vacation", more like get rapped by 10 different guys. I never did like it but if I needed some love, i would, but today I'm trying to find a person. Here, in the Strip of Okama, there are hundreds of buildings, gambling houses, whore houses, hotels, shops, everthing. not finished Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
LionheartXIII 6 Posted December 6, 2010 Day 4 So Gabe and I go to the Strip of Okama just fine, besides me getting bit by a giant rat and having to puke for 3 hours, we got there just in time for the "Free for All". The "Free for All" is when all the whore houses and gambling houses have there girls go out and have some compony "vacation", more like get rapped by 10 different guys. I never did like it but if I needed some love, i would, but today I'm trying to find a person. Here, in the Strip of Okama, there are hundreds of buildings, gambling houses, whore houses, hotels, shops, everthing. not finished Nice!!! I can't wait to see what happens next!! What happens in Okama stays in Okama! ^^ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted December 15, 2010 Day 4 So Gabe and I go to the Strip of Okama just fine, besides me getting bit by a giant rat and having to puke for 3 hours, we got there just in time for the "Free for All". The "Free for All" is when all the whore houses and gambling houses have there girls go out and have some compony "vacation", more like get rapped by 10 different guys. I never did like it but if I needed some love, i would, but today I'm trying to find a person. Here, in the Strip of Okama, there are hundreds of buildings, gambling houses, whore houses, hotels, shops, everthing. As soon as I walk in to the Strip, 15 guards, police enforcers, and the L. A. W., also known as the Local Ass Wipes, or Local Associative Workers. They came up to me all big and bad sayin', "The Mrs. Okama needs to see you." I was like, "Whuuuu!? Okama is a lady!?!?! Wow." So I walk to the infomous Craxy Ei8ht casino. This place is like a heaven inside a heaven. It had Gold-Titranium plates. Worth $100,000$. That's a lot. The floor was of the finest Lakesrets hair. A Lakesret is a fowel beast that is a pain to kill. Took me nearly 30 minutes to kill that thing. Any way, the people were all nice ass holes. What that means is that they were stuck up but were nice to me since I was a "VIP", what ever that means. The guards all escorted me to the elevator and stood next to me the whole time. I was getting nervous since Gabe had to stay outside. All of a sudden, a voice perked up on the intercom in the elevator. "Hello Broian Darkum, nice to see you finaly. I have a waited this visit along time. So lets make it worth while. Those guards are going to give you a one minute head start to get to my office on the top 29th floor. If you make it, you will get a reward. But if you don't, you shall be strapped to a chair and asked questions. Do you understand?" "Yes I sure do." "Your minute starts now." not done, almost though ^^ Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Macroxen 32 Posted December 16, 2010 Day 4 So Gabe and I go to the Strip of Okama just fine, besides me getting bit by a giant rat and having to puke for 3 hours, we got there just in time for the "Free for All". The "Free for All" is when all the whore houses and gambling houses have there girls go out and have some compony "vacation", more like get rapped by 10 different guys. I never did like it but if I needed some love, i would, but today I'm trying to find a person. Here, in the Strip of Okama, there are hundreds of buildings, gambling houses, whore houses, hotels, shops, everthing. As soon as I walk in to the Strip, 15 guards, police enforcers, and the L. A. W., also known as the Local Ass Wipes, or Local Associative Workers. They came up to me all big and bad sayin', "The Mrs. Okama needs to see you." I was like, "Whuuuu!? Okama is a lady!?!?! Wow." So I walk to the infomous Craxy Ei8ht casino. This place is like a heaven inside a heaven. It had Gold-Titranium plates. Worth $100,000$. That's a lot. The floor was of the finest Lakesrets hair. A Lakesret is a fowel beast that is a pain to kill. Took me nearly 30 minutes to kill that thing. Any way, the people were all nice ass holes. What that means is that they were stuck up but were nice to me since I was a "VIP", what ever that means. The guards all escorted me to the elevator and stood next to me the whole time. I was getting nervous since Gabe had to stay outside. All of a sudden, a voice perked up on the intercom in the elevator. "Hello Broian Darkum, nice to see you finaly. I have a waited this visit along time. So lets make it worth while. Those guards are going to give you a one minute head start to get to my office on the top 29th floor. If you make it, you will get a reward. But if you don't, you shall be strapped to a chair and asked questions. Do you understand?" "Yes I sure do." "Your minute starts now." All the guards are all tense and ready to go and then I just sit there. i look at my watch and see that the one minute is almost up. So I just pull out my sword and the guards freak out they are all like "WHAT THE firetruck ARE YOU DOING YOU CRAZY BASTURD! YOU'RE GOING TO GET US KILLED!!" ^^ "I know! That's the point, to get rid of you guys." The elivator was only 8' by 8.5' so it wasn't very hard to decapitate all the gaurds with ease. The sound of B.A.M.F.S. going and seperating the vertabrates was very soothing to the ear. THe crackel and poping of the spine give way and the way the blood splatterd was very artistic. The elivator stopped at the top 29th floor. And I just took my time and walked leasuirly twards the office. That is untill i triped on something and got impaled through my right arm with a spear. I fell since the force of the impact was around 4 G's. Broke my nose and got a 2 inch gash in my head. Didn't wake up till the next day. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites