Text Poem to Her (You and the five senses)

[guillus 3]

I see the clouds in the sky,

And I see you...

I hear the water coursing down the river,

And I hear you...

I feel the earth beneath my feet,

And I feel you...

I smell the flowers on a vast prairie,

And I smell you...

The only difference between being alone and beingwith you is that by being with you I can actually "taste" you,

Which is impossible,

For you are forever out of my reach...

 

 

(this my first poem, it repeats itself a bit, but thats all i could come up with, be harsh on your evaluation)

[Zexion's_Lover_46 76]

Why be harsh it was a nice poem to read.

[No 0]

So you want us to be harsh? Every thing I say past this point is going to be opposite then.

It sucks and I my seven year old cosine could do a better job.

there. harsh enough? Mind you I mean the opposite of what I just said.

[No 0]

So you want us to be harsh? Every thing I say past this point is going to be opposite then.

It sucks and I my seven year old cosine could do a better job.

there. harsh enough? Mind you I mean the opposite of what I just said.

[Sorage55 10]

A nice poem for starters, always use whats from the heart, and its an instant masterpiece.

[SuperPunk 13]

This is honestly beautiful. I love how you incorperated the senses.

 

 

I love it.

[PersianRose13 14]

I love the poem so much.

[CardCaptorDeadpool 386]

Im not gonna lie it wasnt perfect, but it was sweet although you might wanna omit the part about tasting.