Text The story of Riku's nobody

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Chapter 10

I saw the man and i thought he would be big touble if i don't kill him right now. I rushed to the man, but the man then sented a X slash at me. I dodge it the best i could, but he was to fast. He stabed me with his draggers and i fell to the floor. I had blood coming from my body and i couldn't get up. The man then knocked me out and sented me to another world.

 

I was in a bed with my wounds covered. I saw a man with long blonde hair and two blue draggers on his hip.'' So this must be the person Xemnas is trying to look for. His brother, Vanten.''i said to my shelf trying to be quiet. He was talking to a boy with long white hair and red eyes. He was wearing a coat too, so i couldn't see his weapons.'' So does he really know where Ventus it at.''said the man with white hair.'' Yes, All we need to do is use him to get to CO and then find the room of sleep.''said the man with the draggers.'' I need to get out of here before they kill me to use me in their plan.''i thought. I got out of the bed and opened the window to the room and left. I saw that i was in Twilight Town.

[Stardustblade358 806]

Nice.It's getting really exciting,please write more.

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Chapter 11

I started walking though the town until i saw Vexen.'' Hello. I must kill you in the name of lord Xemnas.''said Vexen as he got out his sheild. I bought out my soul eater and clashed with his sheild.'' Haha you are indeed strong, But you can't beat the ice.''said Vexen as he broke away from the clash.'' Lets see if you can beat my limit break.''said Vexen as he held his sheild in the air.'' FREZZE,JIO.''yelled Vexen as he got ice froze over him. I went to break it, but he broke it himshelf and he had two ice blades on his arms and ice wings. He also had a ice battle suit on him.'' Lets see if you can beat me.''said Vexen as he clashed blades with me. I broke away from the clash and went into limit break level 1.'' I see you can go into level 1 without saying its name.''said Vexen as he flew in the air.'' NOW TAKE THIS. ICE STORM.''said Vexen as he summoned a ice storm that sollawed me up.

[Ai Enma 7]

Better and Better!!

[AurorasSky69 5]

This is getting really good write more! Please!

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Chapter 12

I saw in the middle of the ice storm.'' I can't fly. Dang it. My wings are frzon.''i said to myshelf.'' WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO DO NOW. NOBODY HAS BEEN ABLE TO ECASPE MY ICE STORM!''yelled Vexen as he got his blades ready for another attack. I then got blackwing and held to my neck.'' SOAR,FEATHER KNIGHT!'' i yelled. I then came out of the ice storm in limit break level two.'' Get ready Vexen. I defeated Saix with this.'' i said as i disappeared and reappeared behind Vexen and when he turned around he then got slashed by me. His wings came off and he flew staight to the ground. He was defeated and i came out of level two.'' Flew. Looks like i win.''i said as i got on the ground and started to walk in the forest of the town.

I looked at the forest, but right when i got there i saw a man in armer.'' Hey who are you?''i asked as the man took off his suit.'' My name is Xehornot and i have the body of the keyblade master Terra.''said the man.

[Stardustblade358 806]

So cool!Oh please write more!

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Chapter 13

I looked at the man.'' Wait what do you mean'' I have the body of the keyblade master Terra.''?''i asked as i looked at the man. The man then faded away before he can answer.'' Great another plobme i have to face,''I said as i saw a portol and went though it and ended up at the world that never was.'' Great I'm in thsi dump again.''i said as i walk around the town. I kept walkin until i saw Xemnas.'' Hello Xemans. I was coming for you, but you founded me frist.'' I said.;; You must be killed my nobody.''said Xemnas as he bought out his laser blades. I rushed to him and clashed blades with him.'' Lets see what you are really made of Xemnas.''i said as i backed away from the fight.'' FLY,BLACKWING!''i yelled as i got into level 1.'' I see let me show you my limit break.breath,dragon ui.''said Xemnas as he got into level 1.( Its his frist dragon suit in KH2 with all the powers.) I saw the suit and he then stabed me in the gut.'' Nobody blast.''said Xemnas

[Ai Enma 7]

You can make something turn into something important to the story! This is getting better and better because the story has a good author. This should be a real story it gets my standing on me feet to see the next chapter! Keep right better and better! Awesome dude!

[Sora not Roxas 0]

Nobody blast? Is that something you made up or is it the blast that turn Nobodies (High ones) Into dusk?

 

Ignore that question. I like how you place certain things into the story from the overall kh series and mix it some things you made up. Keep up the good work, and your grammar is improving overall to. Now I can really get into the story . And like I said before, not a BLEACH fan so seeing it mix with kh didn't make me too happy. But I got to say, you are pulling it off quite nicely dude.

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Chapter 14

I got away from the blast before it was fried. I clashed blades with Xemnas. He was to strong. I was pushed away to a building.'' You see. You should give up.''said Xemnas as he rised up his blade. I dodged the bast i could. I then slashed him on the chest. He got anger and clashed blades with him. I got to the top of the sky and rose my blade up.'' Soar,Black kinght.'' i said. I went into level two and used a level 5 feather shot on Xemnas, He then rose his blade.'' Time to use my second level.''said Xemnas.'' Fly,Dragon oiy.''said Xemnas as a black cloud came around him. He then appeared as a dragon.(Its the frist dragon from Kh2.). I looked at the dragon. It was ginat and it then fried a ginat laser blast at me. The building collapsed and i was knock out of level two. The dragon powered up a ginat nobody blast and fried it at me.

[Ai Enma 7]

The story chapters are getting better and better because the story has a great and wonderful author. You are a good writer and you have skills that one day would be successful in your life. Mostly I don't really care about grammar or spelling because I can understand it anyway. You are one awesome person! Keep doing what you do best dude!

 

Amaya

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Chapter 15

I dodged the blast as fast i could. I then blasted the dragon with my nobody blast. The dragon went down to the ground and took down a building with it. I walked to the rubbled and saw that no person was there. Then laszer's came out and shot me. I held my wounds and saw Xemnas in a black and white coat.'' You see this is my final limit break. This will defeat you my nobody.''said Xemnas as he blasted some more lazers. I dodged them the best i can and got into level 2. I then shot a level 4 feather shot. It dameged Xemnas and he then stabed Xemnas in the side. He spitted out blood. He then fired up about a million lazers. He then fried them at me. I blocked them and refected them too. There were to much. Right when i was about to die some man with a blind fold came in the lazers and blocked them with a dark sheild. He then refected the rest at Xemnas. Xemnas went down after that and went back to regular form. I then passed out and and saw the man hold me and he opened a potorl and he then walked in it with me in his hands.

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This story is getting a whole lot better and exciting.Please write more.:O

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Chapter 16

I woke up in a bed in a white room.'' So your awake.''said a girl.'' My name is Namine. Its great that we finally get to meet.''said Namine. I looked at her. She had blonde hair and a white dress on.'' What happen?'' i asked.'' You were resured by my friend Riku.''said Namine.'' Riku. Hes my somebody.'' i said.'' Yes he is and you were not suppose to be here.''said Namine.'' I know. Xemnas said the samething.''i said.'' Yes your not suppose be alive. The people who saw you or talked to you will lose their memorys of you.''said Namine. I looked a ther saw a man enter the room.'' So your Riku huh. Guess we need to form as one once more.'' i said.'' Yes. My power's to contorl my darkness are in you. I need you.''said Riku. I looked at him. I got up and saw my body disappearing.'' Whats.''I asked.'' You are disappearing and returning to Riku. You only had about like 72 hours on the worlds.''said Namine. I was disappearing. I looked at Riku and said this.'' Hey tell Sora to get me when i call him.''i said as i disappeared.'' Sure.''said Riku. I similed and looked at the sky.'' Sister I'm coming.'' i said as i disappeared.

THE END?

[Stardustblade358 806]

So sad.I loved it,but so sad.Awsome story.