A Shift of Heart

whoa awesome

simply awesome

can't wait for more!

Thats awesome man I love how your story is well written

haha thanks by the way i like your avatar!! <3

Chapter 3

whoa it gets better and better

Begin Chapter 4

Sora emerged from the Dark Door and found himself standing on a large plain. As he surveyed his surroundings he found that keyblades were plunged into the hard earth. There were hundreds of keyblades on each side of the plain, they must have been two groups against each other. And in between them there was a large open space that seemed quaint and calm.

Chapter 5

Vanitas growls and yells,

so what do you guys think? Crit and questions/requests/ideas?

Oh no... Namine, stay away from the unversed!!

Great story, by the way.

Lol thank you! =]

A Shift of Heart FTFW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is just great, you write and describe everything so well! I loved it. <3

I actully like it. It's a very good story. My only criticsism would be to increase the font size on your first post

I actully like it. It's a very good story. My only criticsism would be to increase the font size on your first post

 

Lol, this story sounds way too familar to mine. Or at least in the beginning.

It's good. I only have two problems:

1) It's ok to introduce new characters to the story, but don't try adding in new characters and make it so the people know him. Yes, I'm talking about Denzel. Adding in an OC in a KH fanfic is kind of weird. You should of introduced Denzel because I don't think anyone knows him owo.

2) If this mysterious person in the black cloak happens to be Sora, I'm going to be upset I only say this because I don't like the fact that people bring back dead characters in an impossible way. I know you'll probably tell us how it happens, but it really wouldn't make sense for someone to be dead a year to be brought back. Just saying.

Overall, I don't find any problems with the plot, setting, or details. But I'm finding that characters are seeming like a problem within the story. Maybe that's just me, but it's bothering. It's still a good read though.

Lol, this story sounds way too familar to mine. Or at least in the beginning.

 

It's good. I only have two problems:

 

1) It's ok to introduce new characters to the story, but don't try adding in new characters and make it so the people know him. Yes, I'm talking about Denzel. Adding in an OC in a KH fanfic is kind of weird. You should of introduced Denzel because I don't think anyone knows him owo.

 

2) If this mysterious person in the black cloak happens to be Sora, I'm going to be upset I only say this because I don't like the fact that people bring back dead characters in an impossible way. I know you'll probably tell us how it happens, but it really wouldn't make sense for someone to be dead a year to be brought back. Just saying.

 

Overall, I don't find any problems with the plot, setting, or details. But I'm finding that characters are seeming like a problem within the story. Maybe that's just me, but it's bothering. It's still a good read though.

 

1st it's denzel from FF7-advent children...sorry people i didn't say...

2nd NUUUUU sora is dead as a doornail!!

thanks again!!

Chapter 7

On another world far away a portal of darkness appeared and a teenage boy with silver hair stepped out. He looked around at the world that had been ravaged by Vanitas. So many people and places lost forever. He shook his head and sighed. He began to walk down a street that led to a small shop in a town that was formerly made of friends and strays from everywhere. He walked up to the door pushed it open. A small group of people sat around a table covered with papers and plans.

He waved his hand and muttered

good, plz plz write more