Joker 1,560 Posted May 21, 2014 (edited) Story by Mikudiva vs Rinfate Editor me BB Chapter 1 ''Haaaaah! Damn I can't land a blow on him!'' I cried in anger. '' What the hell are you doing messing around like that. I expected more from the Great 12th Petal.'' He taunted. ''Shut up!'' I shouted. I was fed up with this already he's just to fast. ''Crap!'' I cursed I stumbled and fell to the ground. His blade drew close to my face. That's it, its all over now. I shut my eyes and prepare for death. I hear my name being called. Over and over again. Im sorry. I hear a curse. I see my most trusted friend next to me. ''You alright Iris?'' He ask's me as he helped me up. Iris....? I feel like I should know that name. Who is this man who saved me? Why do I feel so,so tried. Then everything goes dark. I think I had a dream. A man was carrying me. He had Black Hair, Green eyes. He was running with me in his arms. Then two wings burst from his back and we flew up into the air. My eyes open. I see people with masks standing over me. I feel great pain all over my body. They work fast. ''It hurts.'' I say softly. None of them seem to hear. I feel my body being split open. I scream in pain. A mans voice shouts something then one masked figure injects something into my arm. Despite the pain I begin to feel sleepily. I hear the word Iris being said from around these masked people. Then I close my eyes. Edited May 23, 2014 by Big Boss 1 Amber Cole reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Amber Cole 1,557 Posted May 21, 2014 That's really good! (I might be biased because I love guys with black hair and green eyes ) Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Joker 1,560 Posted May 21, 2014 That's really good! (I might be biased because I love guys with black hair and green eyes ) thanks but my sister is the one who wrote it. im just posting it for her after i edit it.spelling errors etc.. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Amber Cole 1,557 Posted May 21, 2014 tell her its amazing and I want to read more!! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Joker 1,560 Posted May 21, 2014 tell her its amazing and I want to read more!! i'll tell her. i would post more but she only has this much written so far. 1 Amber Cole reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Amber Cole 1,557 Posted May 21, 2014 its good! tell her its easier to make small outlines such as this and then expand on them . I think I might go back and rewrite my story because im seeing a bunch of plot-holes 0_0 Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Joker 1,560 Posted May 23, 2014 (edited) Story by Mikudiva vs Rinfate Editor me BB Chapter 2 My eyes open up. I see a man sitting on a chair next to my bed. ''Who are you?'' I ask him. ''Iris were at the Hospital. How much do you remember?'' The man asked me. I scan his face. He has black hair and green eyes. I feel like I should know him from somewhere. Then I begin to panic as I realize that I don't even know who ''I'' am. '' Iris its okay! I know here.'' The man says to me taking hold of my hand. ''I-I don't where I am, who you are or who I am.'' I tell the man. '' So you don't remember anything.... all right then. '' He sighs. I see a mirror behind him. I have long turquoise hair. Hazel eyes. And a scared wild look on my face. ''Ha! Normally you freak when your hairs a mess and spend forever brushing it out.'' The man laughs. I stare at him. He tries to calm himself down but still has a grin on his face. He takes a deep breath and turns his attention back to me. ''Sorry about that. Its just I'm worried about you. You'd never willingly be a mess like this.'' He says. '' Who are you?'' I ask. I can see pain in his face but the expression is replaced by a simile. ''My name is Brandon. And you probably don't remember your own name. Your Iris the 12th Petal. Your parents came from a long line of Queens and Kings. So your like a princesses. You were chosen along with 11 other girls. By the Holy Goddess to protect this world. The Petal from its flower means tells the story of that persons life. The rest of the sisters became jealous and turned on one another to prepare for war. But your a special case you see. Your number 12 The Dark Petal Iris. Edited May 23, 2014 by Big Boss Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites