Text Lu Xun's stories : Eternal Love

[Lu Xun 2,069]

Hey guys. Decided to do something different today... Write a romance... Hope you enjoy it

*P.S I will update the other story later on!

 

Eternal Love

 

In a far-off place, society was divided in different groups, each one according to how much money people had. It was forbidden to have relations with people that are not from your class. It was considered wrong even simply talk to people that did not belong to your ‘level’. But some people did that secretly, and were in favor of changing that old tradition.

 

The nobles, when they had a daughter, they chose the husband for her, and she was therefore forced to marry and have a happy life with whoever their family had chosen for them.

 

However, one day, a poor man saw one of the noble’s daughter, and his eyes simply couldn’t believe what they were looking at. She was one of the most beautiful girls he had ever seen. To him, she looked like a Goddess that came from the seventh heaven.

 

He was named Wanner, and he was only known amongst the poor people, with the exception of some of his friends that made part of the nobles. He had green eyes, black hair, but wore clothes that could easily take away part of his natural beauty and charm.

 

His best friend, Joshy, who was also from the lowest class, but worked for the baron was with him there. He wasn’t as handsome as Wanner, but he had a nice smile, which was what people constantly noticed on him, and addressed as his best characteristic. Besides that, he had brown eyes and black hair.

 

“She’s just.... everything that I want to have for my entire life...” said Wanner.

“Her? Hahaha! As if you could ever have a girl like that... She’s the daughter of the baron... even if you two ended up together, he’d kill you both, just to keep his family like the tradition says...” said Joshy, Wanner’s best friend.

“Even if it cost my life, I’d gladly give it away just to spend one day with my beloved... I don’t even know her name, but my heart cannot wait til the moment we hold each other’s hands, and dance until the light of the morning...” said Wanner, with a happy tone.

“If that’s your heart most desperate wish, then I think I can be of some help to you... I work for the baron, you know... Maybe I could make some arrangements and who knows? Get you to meet her personally!” said Joshy, as he intended to give some hope to his best friend.

“Are you serious? I could never thank you enough... You really are my best friend, Joshy... Try to make it happen tonight, think you can do it?” said Wanner, as he started to think on a plan.

“Right... I will do my best, and before the sun goes out, I will tell you if I’ve managed to succeed...” said Joshy, with a tone that made it clear that he was going to do everything that’s possible to achieve his best friend’s goal.

“I’ll go search for Rubb, maybe he can help me out as well... With his nice clothes, I bet I can fool anyone...” said Wanner, with a tone of excitement.

Then, Wanner headed back to the baron’s house, while Wanner started looking for his other friend, Rubb, who was a noble, but enjoyed to have friends from other classes, and found it amusing that they all weren’t so different at all. Sarah, the baron’s daughter, was a really calm girl, who was not afraid of anything; she’d do anything to be happy. Every night, she looked from her window to the horizon, hoping that the right man for her appear magically just as the sun and the moon ‘switch places’ every day.

 

However, what she was not aware of, was that her dad had already started looking for the ‘perfect husband’ for her, and surely, soon he’d eventually find one. Her time of freedom was meeting its end, but she was not a girl that accepted everything that destiny arranges for her. She’d surely be sad and angered once she found out what her dad was up to.

 

Before long, Wanner found Rubb, who was alone, in the city’s church. He was praying for his dead parents. They died when Rubb was only fourteen-years, but thankfully, they left some people to take care of him. Rubb was now a fine young man, with eighteen-years. He had blue eyes, black hair, and was considered very handsome by most of the girls’ from their city.

 

“Sorry to interrupt you, Rubb... But could you please lend me some nice clothes, just for tonight? I’m going to meet the love of my life... and as she is the daughter of the baron, I need to at least pretend I’m a noble’s son...” said Wanner, as he desperately tried to convince his friend to lend him some clothes.

“No problem, I already finished praying, but the sadness in my heart will never go away... It will stay, as long as there’s life in this young body... But about the clothes, sure, why not? Let’s go to my home, and there you can choose whatever fits you the best....” said Rubb, with a tone that made it clear that he could never forget his past.

After one hour, Wanner finally decided which clothes he’d use to meet Sarah. He stood just as prince when he wore them. Before the moon came out, Joshy came to warn that he had successfully arranged for them to meet, at the end of the night, when everyone would be sleeping, and both of them could have at least some minutes to present each other.

 

With this, the situation was set. Wanner would head to the baron’s castle, and thanks to Joshy, he’d easily get in, and finally be able to at least witness his beloved girl’s beauty once more.

[Naught 44]

Lu Xun, your stories never fail to impress. Great job

[coolwings 1,546]

Very good. One thing I love about your stories is that your so good at explaining the characters and making they come alive in your mind. Something you could do better would be to explain the setting a bit more and the surroundings of the place the characters are in.

[Leaxel 178]

You gotta continue this story! Looks kinda Romeo and Juliet-ish, which is a good thing.

Edited June 16, 2012 by Leaxel

[Junko 2,815]

Good way to start it off. keep up the good work