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Text Lu Xun's fanfics : A Unique Christmas! - A Fanfic of Roxas, Xion and Axel!

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I think I've already thanked you enough in the IM, lol

Just one suggestion for future stories, you should add some more dialogue.

LOVE IT.

 

I'll try to haha :) You're welcome once again!

 

And thanks to you guys that liked and commented ^^

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I really liked it. Xion saying how they would remember it when they were old broke my heart, in a good way. I felt some serious feels, not unlike when I played the game.

 

As for criticism: "It’s a special date, where people give presents to each other... It’s so fantastic... In the past, I used to give presents to my best friend, a boy named Isa. But now, our great friendship seems to have vanished" The reason I put that in bold is Axel is kind of informal and it's weird to imagine him saying that so well, formally.

 

Good job.

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