Lu Xun 2,069 Posted September 28, 2011 Hey guys. Here I’m again Today, the teacher asked us to do an essay about What living well means to us, and so, like I love to share the things I write here, I’ve copied it, and translated to English, and so here you go. She asked it to be only 15 lines, so sorry, but it's small :C Hope you enjoy it, and if you can, comments would be appreciated See you soon. What is necessary to live well? The main goal of every person in this world is to manage to have a good life, with only happiness and without any worries. However, then, there comes the great question : What is necessary to live well? In order to have a life relatively good, countless things are needed. But, the most important one is to have health. When it is absent, it’s impossible to have a good life. Taking care of health is fundamental for those, whose objective is to have a pleasant life. Besides health, the economic situation comes right after, occupying the second position. Money isn’t everything, but there is one thing that is true : without it, the life turns difficult, because nowadays, what differs a person from other is their acquisitive power. Another important aspect in the life of the people is to have a person, who they can surely rely on during hard times, like when you lose a member of your family or a friend. It’s not possible to have a good life, filled with only good feelings alone. Even if a person is surrounded by money, if it doesn’t have a friend nor a family member, it will impossible for it to achieve happiness. There’s also another thing, which is relevant if you want to have a good, long and happy life. You must not have hatred, envy and any and every other bad feeling. Having only good feelings helps a lot. You don’t need to be, but you can be sympathetic with others. By just doing a small gesture, like opening the door to the others, saying thanks, and doing something for someone if you are able to. You will surely feel better, and the people around you will only wish good things for you. Through these paragraphs, it’s possible to notice that being able to have a good life isn’t an easy task. It may time time, but everyone can fulfil this goal if they work hard. Don’t forget, if everything seems to be against you, just wait, and you will see that positive things will happen. The important thing is to never give up, no matter how dark it seems to be! 8 Luna☆, Kirie, Zexion's_Lover_46 and 5 others reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Luna☆ 108 Posted September 28, 2011 So very true what you wrote, your so good at writing and I sure your teacher will liked it. 1 Lu Xun reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
PersianRose13 14 Posted September 28, 2011 Wow, rarely when I read other peoples work(whether they be famous or not) I am at a loss of words. But by reading this, I am speechless. That is the highest compliment I can give. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
3636yousef 20 Posted September 28, 2011 I like what you wrote and it is true! well done! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
dusk 910 Posted September 28, 2011 You are genius on writing! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aru Akise 2,540 Posted September 28, 2011 So true. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
*Rikku* 90 Posted September 28, 2011 cool no words for Greys anatomy!!! YEAH Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kirie 3,489 Posted September 28, 2011 i agree with the people who said its true !! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Master Sora 0 Posted September 28, 2011 That was very well exspressed and put together very nice job Lu Xun. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Junko 2,815 Posted September 28, 2011 good job my friend http://kh13.com/forum/public/style_emoticons/default/happy.png Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Evil-Ven-the darkness king 5 Posted September 28, 2011 hmm...not bad very good. I'm sure you got a good grade on it already Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rikunobodyxiii 700 Posted September 28, 2011 Good essay. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Slicer9875 27 Posted September 28, 2011 What level of writing is this supposed to be? I mean elementary school, middle school, high school or college? Just asking for frame of reference for how well it needs to be written. Now for feedback: intro seems a bit sudden but then again you've got limited lines to work with so you don't really have a choice. Some parts could be rephrased like There’s also another thing That could become Another aspect to consider is ... Other sentences could be combined You must not have hatred, envy and any and every other bad feeling. Having only good feelings helps a lot. Having good feelings helps a lot and try not to have any hatred, envy and any and every other bad feeling. I'm not sure if this is a problem in your native language or not; it says it was translated into English so this next bit might be unecessary based on the language. The fourth paragraph's second sentence should be Even if the person is surrounded by money, if he or she doesn’t have a friend or a family member, he or she will impossible for it to achieve happiness. As for the second paragraph, just use a sentence or 2 to explain what you mean about health by showing why. And starting off the last paragraph, don't refer back to the other paragraphs like that. Refer instead into the ideas behind them. I know what I wrote sounds a bit critical; it's not personal. Anyway, it is pretty nicely written. Nice job. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted September 28, 2011 I'm in middle school... High School coming next year. 1 3636yousef reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KHlover8 24 Posted September 29, 2011 i loved it! it's... helpful lol and it's very true 1 Lu Xun reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lu Xun 2,069 Posted September 29, 2011 Thanks, guys! I didn't know you'd like it so much I'm sure to post every essay I do on school... I still have one more on the computer, I believe... But not sure when I'm going to post it.... It's about freedoom ;33 1 3636yousef reacted to this Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Zexion's_Lover_46 76 Posted September 29, 2011 I'm no teacher, but I can guarantee you got a passing grade. I know I couldn't have a good life without my family and friends to hold me up. It was short but very informative. Great job! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Indecypher 495 Posted January 18, 2013 acquisitive Awesome vocab. I liked it, job well done. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites