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[Ultimate Oblivion]

Prolough:
At a cold freezing night, a baby who was abandon whom we dont know hisname is at the side of the street when a guy dressed in black said your name will be xehanort.



This is my first time writing so please enjoy it

[Evil-Ven-the darkness king]

wow, this is very intresting. so far, if its a fanfic story, i'd be happy to keep on reading as this story progesses more around the great master xehanort. but the tpoic is very cool, i will do anything to help out master xehanort and your story, if you want to read my stories, i'd be happy to send you a link

[Maffy]

Let's see let's see ! You've picked one of my least fav chars if not the actual last one ! xD It seems interesting since well backstories always give a dif feel to the char (Days made me adore Roxas) and although it gives off a vibe of Organization 13 with the dude in black coat , it can still be interesting If you make the story well made and have a strong connection between the parts in it , it can be great !

[KairiGolden13]

Nice

[KHlover12]

Sounds interesting please write more.

[Naroco]

its ok i need more to give it a rating

[Lu Xun]

Spoiler

Naroco, why didn't you give a rating to my chapters 8D?

The story seems fine so far. Hope to see the 1st chapter soon!

[Ultimate Oblivion]

you guys can give ideas for me

[Ultimate Oblivion]

Chapter 1
Dear Diary
It's been many years since xehanort came to this school, at first, ithought he was a show off but then he beat the bullies one time so he is my best friend. Today we are learning how to use the final level of fire, firaga so i hope i pass.
From Yen Sid
"Hey Yen" said Xehanort."it's class time and stop sticking with your diary.
"comming." said Yen Sid



That's the end of chapter 1 and i will probably post a chapter every week so stay tune

[KHlover12]

It's good but I wish you would make the chapters longer.  Regardless I'm interested in where this is going to go so update soon

[Ultimate Oblivion]

chapter 2
"Today, we will learn about the keyblade war instead of firaga because within a few years time, you must face it. Turn your history textbook to page 189."said the master
"history lesson is the worse"said xehanort
"now read the reason of the keyblade war Yen Sid" the master said
"hmm, they saying about some x-blade and kingdom hearts."Yen Sid said
"correct" the master said
That night, xehanort is having a nightmare of a guy shouting OPEN KINGDOM HEARTS AND UNLEASH THE X-BLADE

i made it a little longer so hope you enjoy it

[Razorwind Keyblade]

This is nice. Who ever knew that Xehanort was once a kid (lol isn't he over 9000!).

[Ultimate Oblivion]

everybody have to go through child age first razorwind keyblade

PS i probably write about xehanorts girlfriend

[Lu Xun]

The story is getting cool. Hope to see the next chapter soon!

[black x feather]

Nice. I like the whole idea of Xehanort being at his young years and all, but I feel something missing from the 1st chapter. That or you did that on purpose.

[Ultimate Oblivion]

chapter 3
xehanort is eating an appolonia(apple in a another world) at his favourate tree when a girl about his age with blue hair fell on him
"what the hell was that for Luna"said xehanort
"oh come on, it was an accident" said Luna
the 2 children was talking about things and homework when xehanort saw a girl with orange hair from Luna
"xehanort?"said Luna
"nothing" said xehanort
that night the same nightmare came again
"the x-blade. kingdom hearts"
xehanort scream when darkness came looming on him for a few seconds

sorry for the long wait, couldn't think of anything for the past 2 weeks

[yayitsdre]

That's really interesting so far. Nice. (:

[rikunobodyxiii]

So far, so good. I'm interested to see how you continue the story.

[Ultimate Oblivion]

chapter 4
"i felt darkness looming the school, is anyone learning forbiden or dark spells in your room" said the master
"no"everyone said
xehanort went to his favourate tree when luna poped out of nowhere again
"hello"said luna
"hello"said xehanort
"would you like to hear a story"said luna
"sure" said xehanort
"Long ago, the world was united and filled with warm light. People loved the light and eventually began to fight over it. Then began the war. Then darkness to find its way into people hearts .darkness consumed the hearts and the light of people. In a flash it spread.The world disappeared into the darkness. A slimmer of light remains in the hearts of children .children gathered there the light recreated the world. However the world was no longer united. They were split into many thousands of small worlds. The true light is hidden deep in the hearts of children."luna said
"how sad"xehanort said
that night, xehanort heard the same voice but this time, he slept walked
"kiiiiiiiiiillllllllllllll" the voice said
xehanort woke up in his bedroom the next morning and saw himself covered in blood.

longer chapter right everyone

[Destati_Dream_XIII]

I'm liking your story so far. I'm looking forward to it as you add more chapters. Great job!